Swans wanted to read some of my ridiculously stupid love poems, and I looked through, and this is most definitely the worst ;D
It was weird because when I was in eighth grade I thought I was in love and it makes me shudder to remember how shallow I was... *shudder*
I really hope he doesn't find this on the net, that would be rather embarrassing; he's already seen it... but for all the rest of you, read, ponder, and laugh! ;D
Every little thing he does It sends my heart spinnin’ away Every day. Every time I look at him It makes me want to cry Don’t know why. Maybe I have fallen into the abyss Hard to miss. Or maybe I’ve just fallen in love With him.
Even when he says he likes me Do I really know? Is it so? Sometimes when his eyes turn to me I begin to feel a pain Falling rain. Maybe I have fallen into the abyss Hard to miss. Or maybe I’ve just fallen in love With him.
Even when we stand together I just can’t help feeling sad Also glad. Well, now I know this love I have Is something truly new Loving you. Maybe I have fallen into the abyss Hard to miss. Or maybe I’ve just fallen in love With him.
Oh I know I’m in love Oh I know I’m in love
He pledges his love to another I can feel my heart shatter. I know there are other fish in the sea But without him it just doesn’t matter.
I’ll go now… I’ll go now… I only want you to know now
That I loved you… I loved you… I loved you so.
Now you know.
As I stagger from the abyss Reawakening Genesis And I’ll try to get over this…
Post by Indistinguishable Blob on Aug 23, 2003 0:39:01 GMT -5
Hee hee, I did that sort of thing too, but it was even worse(In my defence, I was really young and going through my "I'm going to be a succesful rockstar" phase)...I wonder if this is some sort of universal girl thing "oh, I have a crush on him, so I better write a poem/song about him..."
I, quite luckily, have already burned them all (Okay, I threw them in a dumpster, but burning it is just more dramatic...) and do not have to worry about them anymore.
Mamba, that is hilarious...too bad he just said "Nice". You should have gotten points for something...hum...
OH! I love this song! (ignore me. Why do I always seem to end my posts with something like this? Oh...nevermind...)
Wow Mamba, that's ridiculously good for a kid with a stupid crush. It manages to be rhythmic and at the same time the words make sense! You even used repitition properly.
Swans- Heh. When I started reading that I thought it was about Dark. That part about "His tongue speaking words that I can not understand." How do you have a relationship with someone when you can't speak their language? I've had the infatuation-with-that-guy-who-doesn't-speak-a-word-of-english thing but a relationship is different.
I'm glad you like them! Or at least the second one... I'm really proud of that one... much more so than the first.
I suppose it is about soulmates, that's what I thought I'd found at the time... I guess I subconsciously added it to the song. (It is a song, it's got a melody and everything Too high for my range though... hehe)
And yes, I thought it was yours, I like very much. ^_^ Is that the entire poem or part of a longer one?
Both of your poems are very good, in my opinion. Even if the very first one was about a school crush, I still enjoyed it muchly.
I write poems sometimes, but I don't think... wait! I did write a mushy sappy one at one point! It's actually a sonnet (we had to write them for English class), about a guy I met at camp (on whom I had a crush for about 3 years, only though I only saw him about once a year... although he did come to my Jr. prom). Anyways, I have no clue where it is, but I'll do my best to find it if you're interested to hear it. Aside from that, my poetry is pretty angsty (especially the two I wrote after 9/11).
No, not about Dark.. if you noticed the end I speak German. It's about a nazi.. and he spoke English but there were communication problems as well as our cultures being totally different.. however, I find the best relationships are often with guys who don't know English very well. You definitely have more fun..
WHAT!! Is not about me! Then why did you send me that poem with "adios" instead of "auf wiedersehen"?
"There is nothing so cruel in this world as the desolation of having nothing to hope for." -Murakami