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Post by MambaduMal on Jul 21, 2003 9:24:23 GMT -5
Swans wanted to read some of my ridiculously stupid love poems, and I looked through, and this is most definitely the worst ;D
It was weird because when I was in eighth grade I thought I was in love and it makes me shudder to remember how shallow I was... *shudder*
I really hope he doesn't find this on the net, that would be rather embarrassing; he's already seen it... but for all the rest of you, read, ponder, and laugh! ;D
Every little thing he does It sends my heart spinnin’ away Every day. Every time I look at him It makes me want to cry Don’t know why. Maybe I have fallen into the abyss Hard to miss. Or maybe I’ve just fallen in love With him.
Even when he says he likes me Do I really know? Is it so? Sometimes when his eyes turn to me I begin to feel a pain Falling rain. Maybe I have fallen into the abyss Hard to miss. Or maybe I’ve just fallen in love With him. Even when we stand together I just can’t help feeling sad Also glad. Well, now I know this love I have Is something truly new Loving you. Maybe I have fallen into the abyss Hard to miss. Or maybe I’ve just fallen in love With him.
Oh I know I’m in love Oh I know I’m in love
(instrumental) He pledges his love to another I can feel my heart shatter. I know there are other fish in the sea But without him it just doesn’t matter.
I’ll go now… I’ll go now… I only want you to know now
That I loved you… I loved you… I loved you so.
Now you know.
As I stagger from the abyss Reawakening Genesis And I’ll try to get over this…
The abyss.
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Post by MambaduMal on Jul 21, 2003 10:34:22 GMT -5
;D Yes, sure! I'll try and find some more stuff, though it probably won't be as mushy and ucky... glad it made you laugh! When he saw it, I think he said something along the lines of "that's nice". Men.
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Post by pennyroyal on Jul 21, 2003 10:37:53 GMT -5
"thats nice"? XD. HAHAHAHA. that is great.
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Post by BSam on Jul 21, 2003 14:35:05 GMT -5
i have a big folder at home with lots of writing in it...most of it should be designated to the burn pile tho...
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Post by MambaduMal on Jul 21, 2003 14:58:18 GMT -5
I have tons of stuff which ought to be burned... most often I don't anyway
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Post by MambaduMal on Jul 21, 2003 20:03:32 GMT -5
Okay... why is YOUR sappy so much BETTER than MY sappy...?
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Post by Indistinguishable Blob on Aug 23, 2003 0:39:01 GMT -5
Hee hee, I did that sort of thing too, but it was even worse(In my defence, I was really young and going through my "I'm going to be a succesful rockstar" phase)...I wonder if this is some sort of universal girl thing "oh, I have a crush on him, so I better write a poem/song about him..."
I, quite luckily, have already burned them all (Okay, I threw them in a dumpster, but burning it is just more dramatic...) and do not have to worry about them anymore.
Mamba, that is hilarious...too bad he just said "Nice". You should have gotten points for something...hum...
OH! I love this song! (ignore me. Why do I always seem to end my posts with something like this? Oh...nevermind...)
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Post by pennyroyal on Aug 23, 2003 20:34:10 GMT -5
my "im going to be a successful rock star" phase never ended
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Post by Pester on Aug 24, 2003 22:12:42 GMT -5
Wow Mamba, that's ridiculously good for a kid with a stupid crush. It manages to be rhythmic and at the same time the words make sense! You even used repitition properly.
Swans- Heh. When I started reading that I thought it was about Dark. That part about "His tongue speaking words that I can not understand." How do you have a relationship with someone when you can't speak their language? I've had the infatuation-with-that-guy-who-doesn't-speak-a-word-of-english thing but a relationship is different.
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Post by BSam on Aug 25, 2003 5:25:06 GMT -5
so you can tease them without them knowing?
i went out with a japanese girl for a little while... umm... yeah...it wasn't the best experiance i've had...
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Post by MambaduMal on May 3, 2004 14:20:48 GMT -5
Hehe, why the sudden wish for sappy poetry? I have very little of it ready... But I must not let Swans down! *** All the windowpanes in Eden Stained with rain, the tears of ages Silver like the book of dreamers Tears have cleared the ancient pages CHORUS: I’m a hopeless romantic You can’t see me I dream too deeply Mandolins and candlelight Hidden deep in endless night Honey harvest moon in autumn Molded gold, it serenades Tiger lilies in their nightdress Smiling at the sky they made CHORUS Tumbling through a rainkissed curtain Drowned in sound, a melody My love and I are falling gently Blind with shining ecstasy Hopelessly romantic You can’t stop me now I’m sailing through the stars on amber wings CHORUS *** I might've already posted this one: In my daydreams I see The fingertips of sunrise And the stirrings of the velvet canopy We lie together One soul forever With your hand in mine For all eternity I look into your eyes and I see Something so beautiful That only your love could make it be When you’re away The sky is gray So I paint a sunset With my fantasy In my daydreams I see The dancing ocean And the rocky shores of countless centuries I’m watching with you And as I kiss you Do you understand How much you mean to me? I look into your eyes and I see Something so beautiful That only your love could make it be When you’re away The sky is gray So I paint a sunset With my fantasy When you’re not beside me I wither like a moonbeam The stars are fragments of my certainty I hear a shiver The frozen river And the distant hum Of dying poetry I look into your eyes and I see Something so beautiful That only your love could make it be When you’re away The sky is gray So I paint a sunset With my fantasy *** I've got some reeeally sappy prose too, if this isn't enough... I do want so see other peoples' as well, do post! Swans, did you write the poem that you posted?
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Post by MambaduMal on May 3, 2004 20:42:19 GMT -5
I'm glad you like them! Or at least the second one... I'm really proud of that one... much more so than the first. I suppose it is about soulmates, that's what I thought I'd found at the time... I guess I subconsciously added it to the song. (It is a song, it's got a melody and everything Too high for my range though... hehe) And yes, I thought it was yours, I like very much. ^_^ Is that the entire poem or part of a longer one?
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Post by Celinra on May 3, 2004 21:00:51 GMT -5
Both of your poems are very good, in my opinion. Even if the very first one was about a school crush, I still enjoyed it muchly.
I write poems sometimes, but I don't think... wait! I did write a mushy sappy one at one point! It's actually a sonnet (we had to write them for English class), about a guy I met at camp (on whom I had a crush for about 3 years, only though I only saw him about once a year... although he did come to my Jr. prom). Anyways, I have no clue where it is, but I'll do my best to find it if you're interested to hear it. Aside from that, my poetry is pretty angsty (especially the two I wrote after 9/11).
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Post by Dark on May 3, 2004 21:11:31 GMT -5
No, not about Dark.. if you noticed the end I speak German. It's about a nazi.. and he spoke English but there were communication problems as well as our cultures being totally different.. however, I find the best relationships are often with guys who don't know English very well. You definitely have more fun.. WHAT!! Is not about me! Then why did you send me that poem with "adios" instead of "auf wiedersehen"?
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Post by Celinra on May 4, 2004 8:25:33 GMT -5
Alright then... today I will go on a search for my poetry! Hopefully, I'll be able to find some in my messy room.
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