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a song
Aug 22, 2003 23:22:45 GMT -5
Post by pennyroyal on Aug 22, 2003 23:22:45 GMT -5
despite popular demand, ima post a song. (by me) it doesnt have a name, and im not a very big fan of just the lyrics by themselves, but with the music its o.k. (most of the time i write just music, not lyrics.) i may add another verse to it at some point also.
Somewhere deep inside your mind Are things you can't escape from Deny the fact, deny humanity Stare into the sun
You try to make it sound Like you are different But I can tell when you lie Tell me now, do you think it's worth it if you Lie in bed at night and you cry
You wish it would all go away, you just Wish it wasn't real Withdrawal from the world, not knowing It's not a sin to feel
You wish you were Cold and indifferent But you're not quite sure why Baby, was it ever worth it if you Lie awake at night and cry
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a song
Aug 22, 2003 23:29:44 GMT -5
Post by Indistinguishable Blob on Aug 22, 2003 23:29:44 GMT -5
*applause*
Really Pennyroyal, it's great! Believe me, I know all about craptastic songs ( I consider myself something of an expert on the matter... *thinks about her love songs to that one boy back in fifth grade and the fact that she still can't write*) and this isn't one of them.
I especially like the part about it not being a sin to feel.
Superlative! ;D I hope to read more of your songs!
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a song
Aug 23, 2003 12:07:11 GMT -5
Post by pennyroyal on Aug 23, 2003 12:07:11 GMT -5
ummm, "little emu slit" cant say ive heard that one before. perhaps you meant "emo magikarp"?
the music sounds like a cross between tool and chevelle, and the vocals in my head sound like alien ant farm.
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a song
Aug 23, 2003 12:10:10 GMT -5
Post by ponygirl's vapor on Aug 23, 2003 12:10:10 GMT -5
*claps* I like it! Tool and Chevelle..... I'd really like to here that.
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a song
Aug 23, 2003 16:37:35 GMT -5
Post by MambaduMal on Aug 23, 2003 16:37:35 GMT -5
YES! You finally put one up ;D Dude, I love it! The rhyme is great, and there aren't any really annoying clichés in the rhyme or lines... it rocks!!! I especially like "it's not a sin to feel". I (suprisingly) can't think of any criticism right now... darn it... I'd like to hear the music though... but there's really no way to do it... unless you give me some chords or something like that... but as simply poetry, it works just fine... (: I'd put up some of mine, but I'm afraid: a) someone would steal it or b) you'd all hate it... I write happy songs as opposed to teenage anger songs
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