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Post by Sora on May 6, 2005 21:59:47 GMT -5
Part 1
Dante opened his eyes with a yawn as he stared around the airline he was boarded on. A boring romance had been playing on the TV screen in front of him and he must have drifted off. He looked around the packed plane with a dissapointed frown. When he had planned on a vacation to Hawaii he had hoped that he'd be able to go buisness at least but do to 'unexpected debts' had been forced to settle for economy. Dante had had a long month, what with him being a lawyer and getting no weekends off, and was hoping to relax in sunny Honolulu for a few days. He blinked his eyes abit and stared at the two womaen on either side of him. On his right was a beautiful tall woman with a warm yet brisk look about her. She had introduced herself as Antenora and had the voice of a woman that was kind, but not someone you wanted to mess with. On his left was a rather older looking woman with a strictly buisness way about her. Her hair was tied back in a bun, and she seemed always to be endorsed in a book everytime Dante came back from the toilets. Her name was Pandora. Dante looked at his watch and realised they were almost an hour late. Behind him he heard the snoring of a couple, nestled in each others arms fast asleep. Dante smiled, maybe he'd find someone someday. On the opposite row to him was a man in a Hawaian shirt with headphones on gently rocking with the music. All in all it seemed relativly peaceful. Suddenly the floor shook violently Pandora jolted up from her book, and looked around. "What's going on she said?" with a nervous voice. "It's only turbulance." Dante responded with a clam voice. "Nothing's WRONG!" he yelped as the plane began to tumble about violently, The seatbelt sign came on, and despretly Dante fumbled to pull his on. Then with a quick jolt, the plane began to tip and plummet downwards. The woman behind Dante began to scream as the oxygen masks came down and the plane began to move faster toward the water. Dante grabbed his mask and held on. This wasn't the best start to his vacation.
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Post by Dante on May 7, 2005 1:02:33 GMT -5
Am I the main character, or will the focus switch in other chapters?
And is Lost that program where they're all dead or government experiments or something and nobody actually knows what's going on? Because if so, this should be good.
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Post by PJ on May 7, 2005 3:03:15 GMT -5
Interesting, but too many spelling mistakes. Also, strangely enough, I suggested this very story theme (667ers stranded on island) to Derik, but he went with the "Everyone is dead" theme instead. Just as well, now we have both.
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Post by odh on May 7, 2005 3:35:20 GMT -5
Am I the main character, or will the focus switch in other chapters? If he's sticking to the show, every chapter will revolve around a different character, and in the end, they're all mysteriously linked! And is Lost that program where they're all dead or government experiments or something and nobody actually knows what's going on? Because if so, this should be good. No, it's where a plane crashes and they're all stranded on an island, with Polar bears and a mysterious French woman.
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Post by Dante on May 7, 2005 4:18:52 GMT -5
No, it's where a plane crashes and they're all stranded on an island, with Polar bears and a mysterious French woman. I know that they crash land on an island. I just read on a random forum somewhere some wild speculation about what the show was really about, suggestions to which included "They're all dead" and "They're aliens/government clones" and such. Let me go check. --- That site's converted since, and the thead that I read has gone, but I'm pretty sure that they were talking about Lost.
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Post by Antenora on May 7, 2005 5:17:56 GMT -5
My parents are fans of Lost, but I'm not familiar with it. However, from what I've heard it's a very interesting show, and this story looks neat.
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Post by Charles Vane on May 7, 2005 8:49:25 GMT -5
I love the aliens theory. Or the theory thats it all taking place in Locke's or another characters head. And I think I saw an obscure theory somewhere with Sawyer, but I only liked that one because I love Sawyer. When I had to come up with a possible idea for the fine arts showcase me and friend chose Lost. I was Kate, she was Charlie.
I love you for putting me in this story. Also I'm guessing that the premise is Lost but you made up your own characters instead of making us like the ones on the show. Unless I'm reading my books with handcuffs around my wrists or every time Dante went to the bathrooms he was checking on his supply of cocaine.
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Post by Dante on May 7, 2005 8:52:35 GMT -5
Unless I'm reading my books with handcuffs around my wrists or every time Dante went to the bathrooms he was checking on his supply of cocaine. Yeah, I don't know about you, but that would be rather out-of-character for me.
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Post by Sora on May 7, 2005 15:46:21 GMT -5
Yes LOST gave the idea, but the plot line, and charctors are all my idea. The next chapter will be focussed around PJ the Hawaian shirted guy from the previous part.
Part 2
PJ opened his eyes. He had squeezed them shut and had realised he must have passed out during the crash. He looked around at the area around him and groaned. His head ached like hell and he must of landed on his butt when falling out of the plane. Then suddenly he realised just that. He had fallen out of the plane. "AHHHHHHH!" he screamed as he took in his surroundings. He was lying on the ground near the sand of a beach. His ears started picking up noise. There were screaming. A lot of screaming. With an ache of pain he began to stand up and walk down towards the beach. People were running around, some with their hands on their head, others running around for their luggage. Half the plane, or at best 1/3 was there on the beach. Suddenly a tall man whacks into him. PJ stumbled and looks around. The man was relativly young and had fair hair with a bad look about him. "Shove off, dinkfrit, I need to get through to the plane!" the man cried in anger. "What are you in a hurry for?" PJ yelled as the man rushed past, but he didn't look back. PJ was still in agony but began to move toward a few people, trying to figure what was going on. He recognised one of the woman as Kimia, the woman who he had switched seats with. She had been in so much of a hurry not to sit in his row, it seemed almost peculiar. With her was the man that had been on his right on the plane, Dorian Stringfellow. "PJ!" Dorian called, "It's so good to see your alive!" Pj smiled "Yeah, I'm right as pain." he said. "What are you all doing?" Kimia spoke up, "We're going to try to get some people together and try to sort out what we are going to do." "I'll help with whatever you need done." "Good to have you on our side, mate." Dorian said. "No lets find some peole who aren't completly freaked out." The group walked in silence for a while till they found three people huddled together. He regonised them as the people oppodite to him on the plane. "He guys." PJ said. "You making camp?" "No replied" the man in the group. "We were going to go out and see if we can find any more survivors in the bush" PJ laughed, "You don't want to just sit and enjoy the beauty?" The group smiled. PJ was good at keeping people's spirits up. The men at his work always called him the Happy mobile, for when anyone was sad, PJ was always there with a joke and a smile ready to help. "Well I'm PJ" he said leaning out his hand. "I'm Dante." The man replied, "And this is Pandora and" "Antenora dear, I can introduce myself Dante." Antenora interuppted. Kimia and Dorian introdued themselves, and as the motley crew of survivors same together, a the plane exploded in the background.
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Post by Antenora on May 7, 2005 15:58:14 GMT -5
I wonder if there are any other survivors, besides the ones we've met so far...This is very good, do keep writing.
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Post by Charles Vane on May 7, 2005 15:58:31 GMT -5
Yeah, I don't know about you, but that would be rather out-of-character for me. Are you saying that me being in handcuffs isn't out of character? I don't know what your insinuating but I think I'm offended. And new chapter, yay. Sirius me is new and intriguing.
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Post by sloop on May 7, 2005 16:18:52 GMT -5
Oh, nice story so far! I've never seen Lost but I've heard commercial things for it on the radio. Keep writing!
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Post by Sora on May 7, 2005 18:19:09 GMT -5
Thanks guys, I'm glad to hear its getting good audience. The main charactors are:
Dante Antenora PJ Pandora Kimia Dorian Amber- She and Ennui come in soon(Jin/Sun.....) Ennui Beatrix and Dauntless- the guy that whacked PJ
There are others, but I'll let you wait and see.....
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Post by PJ on May 7, 2005 18:36:29 GMT -5
Splendid! A chapter about me! And I thought the tall guy was BSam, for a moment. Good story. Do go on.
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Post by Sora on May 7, 2005 19:04:16 GMT -5
Part 3- Pandora
Pandora squinted toward the sun. She was attempting to self bandage her arm with some band- aids Antenora had in her bag. The group had decided to split up, one half, Dante Antenora and PJ, going off to find survivors, and the other half staying here to assist the people who were harmed, or burnt in the explosion. Pandora was not a trained medic however, and winced often at the site of blood everywhere. Suddenly a man ran up to her, yelling "Help her, please can anyone help her! She's going to die if she doesn't get help fast!" The man looked genuinly upset, and Pandora quickly ran up to him to ask what the problem was. "She's trapped! She tried to grab our bags, and then the plane exploded and.." he stopped mid-sentence and pointed, then fell to the ground crying. Pandora rushed over to the girl. It didn't look good. She eas burnt on her arms and legs and her face was cut and scratched. But the worse thing was that she wan't breathing, and her pulse was faltering. Pandora panicked. Being a librarian did not really show here how to save a woman's life and she didn't know what to do. Then she remembered what her father had taught when she was young, at the beach. 'Mouth to mouth, Pandora, is the first thing you do to a person not breathing.' With this thought at hand she lifted the girls head up and began to blow into her mouth. It wasn't working. She pumped her stomach hard then tried again. This time it worked. She suddenly opened her eyes and sucked air. She breathed quickly then yelled out "Ennui! Is he all right! Ennui!" The man crying turned around and gasped. "Amber its you! Oh thank god! Thank you miss thank you!" Ennui ran towards Amber and hugged her tight and both cried in joy. Pandora realised she was begining to cry. She remebered her husband, who'd passed away in the army. She walked away from the happy couple, and began moving toward the other survivors. They weren't all that many. Most were either dead in the wreckage or lying moveless in the sand. She cursed the sky. She wasn't a Christian woman, but sometimes she just had to ask why God did things like this. Why he left them with this fate? As it turned out, It wasn't God.
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