braveowl
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Memento Mori to all lads lasses and all other sorts of peevish people
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Post by braveowl on May 10, 2015 14:50:11 GMT -5
What do you think of my narrative................THE ARSONIST
Mr. Kington was a bad old man, Who hurt many people, With his power in hand. No surprise when he went up in smoke;
She was a girl with nothing to lose, She hated this man, Couldn't live with her blues. So she took her revenge with fire;
Her hatred boiled, she made her plan, she went to him, with the bomb to make her stand, And cornered him in his dull arid office.
“You may be rich rich and you may be smart, But you killed a man; Your bullet pierced his heart, And I was there to watch my father fall.”
Then she unbuttoned her jacket, And took out a box. He went at her with fire hatchet, But she pushed it, she pushed the button down.
The entire building engulfed in flames, And fast it burnt, Many died, and many were maimed. No one, no one made it out unscathed;
And we all remember that towers fall, but few know who, The girl who caused it all. And gave her life for vengeance, was it right?
The worst case of arson, many say, The rich man died, Many are glad that he ended that way. Was she selfish to let innocent people die?
To the girl the act was right, to victim's families, wrong. But one bad man dies that fateful night, And no one is sorry that he’s gone.
Make sure you're nice and make sure you hug, So when you're dead, People remember and miss you with love, And your memory lives on fondly.
I only put that last part in so I don't seem completely dark
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Post by Linda Rhaldeen on May 10, 2015 18:14:38 GMT -5
Remind me to never meet you in a dark alley at night.
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braveowl
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Post by braveowl on May 10, 2015 18:48:23 GMT -5
Ah so its a sucess
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Post by Poe's Coats Host Toast on May 11, 2015 4:03:10 GMT -5
The fourth verse reminded me of "Hello. My name is Inigo Montoya. You killed my father. Prepare to die."
It also sounds like it's been inspired (maybe inadvertently) by the so called Child ballads (trad. folk songs from pre-19th century).
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braveowl
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Post by braveowl on May 11, 2015 16:48:44 GMT -5
Yes I was totally inspired by the great ballads and not intimidated by my teacher.....
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Post by Isadora Is a Door on May 12, 2015 1:08:15 GMT -5
you are weird.
I like you.
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braveowl
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Memento Mori to all lads lasses and all other sorts of peevish people
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Post by braveowl on May 12, 2015 6:17:58 GMT -5
Because I'm in a good mood, I'll take that as a compliment , but be warned
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Post by Isadora Is a Door on May 12, 2015 12:45:32 GMT -5
of what? murderous poets?
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Duchess
Catastrophic Captain
Bye Bye Li'l Sebastian
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Post by Duchess on May 13, 2015 9:47:02 GMT -5
Mister Owl
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braveowl
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Post by braveowl on May 13, 2015 14:47:33 GMT -5
When you take your last breaths you will finally understand
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Post by penne on May 13, 2015 18:40:12 GMT -5
braveowl for best new member and best writing and best thread
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braveowl
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Memento Mori to all lads lasses and all other sorts of peevish people
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Post by braveowl on May 14, 2015 5:13:23 GMT -5
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Post by Hermes on May 14, 2015 8:01:23 GMT -5
braveowl for best new member and best writing and best thread And Most Notorious? And braveowl and bandit for Best Pairing?
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Post by soufflé on May 14, 2015 8:40:46 GMT -5
What was that rhyme scheme though
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Post by Poe's Coats Host Toast on May 14, 2015 9:52:42 GMT -5
Seems like A, B, A, C, with the exception of the last cursive-written verse where nothing rhymes, and the preceding two verses where every line rhymes A, B, A, B.
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