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Post by isadora on Feb 24, 2004 22:04:50 GMT -5
heres some random poetry i wrote when i was board
a glance of fait has tainted the world and all i have left is u
a twist of hate the darkness twirled and all i have left is u
a stem of a rose prickled w/ thorns and all i have left is u
a beautiful bow an arrow thrown and all i have left is u
a bullet shot a friend forgot and all i have left is..
:Pwell whad'ya think i just made it up off the topp of my head and well its not really about anything
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Post by Indistinguishable Blob on Feb 24, 2004 22:25:53 GMT -5
Oooooh *applause*
That was great! I love the opening lines for each verse, and the same last line thing...it's very nicely put together....wow.
Post more. *poke* Now. Post. Post. *double poke*
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Post by isadora on Feb 24, 2004 22:48:12 GMT -5
well ok but this is just off the top of my hed right now i see u in the dark but u arent really there i see u in the rain but all u do is stare i wonder y i see u i wonder y im blind i dont think u see the person inside hoo really matters but i see u there ya go i didnt really trie though
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Post by negativenine on Mar 2, 2004 17:14:33 GMT -5
I'd go through the spelling, but it's definitely some great stuff! Especially for off the top of your head!
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Post by isadora on Mar 6, 2004 9:25:46 GMT -5
yeah my friends say im terrible speller but thats ok thanks im really shy about my poetry and it took alot of guts to start this thread
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Post by negativenine on Mar 7, 2004 12:14:20 GMT -5
I know the feeling. I write tons of crap. I write every day, almost, but no sharey. It's just a weird personal thing...
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