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Post by Zombie-chan on Dec 23, 2003 14:36:05 GMT -5
I want to know what you guys think of this...be honest!
For thousands of years my kin have dwelled In Lorien and Rivendell; We spent our carefree nights and days With dancing in the hidden glades, Filling the air with Elven-song-- The world was pure, our lives were long.
The Shadow came, and Elves and Men Together went to battle then: The Ring, by which the war was won, Was captured by Elendil's son; His chance to destroy evil came, He turned it down in search of fame.
Dark times are now in Middle Earth Which test the weight of mortals' worth; They must unite under Isildur's heir, The Ring must be unmade with care. The Valar's light begins to fade-- The time of Elves has passed away.
My people leave for the Undying Lands And place this world in mortals' hands. Our twilight falls; we say farewell To Lorien and Rivendell, But we will ever linger on In mortals' tales and in their song.
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Post by Indistinguishable Blob on Dec 23, 2003 16:05:44 GMT -5
*applause* WOW! That was great! I haven't read LOTR in a long time...but...brilliant! I loved it...well written and the like...whee.
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Post by Zombie-chan on Dec 23, 2003 16:36:57 GMT -5
*blushes* Thanks!
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Post by Fife on Dec 24, 2003 16:40:49 GMT -5
yeah! that was really good! it flows really good!
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Post by Sheepdogg Plankton on Jan 2, 2004 10:40:09 GMT -5
wow! goood! can you read my song parodies, I've got a LOTR one. it should be in this section...
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Post by Peppermint on Jan 2, 2004 13:35:41 GMT -5
Wow! that was really good!
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Post by negativenine on Jan 2, 2004 18:06:27 GMT -5
Oh my god! That was GREAT! It's really well styled, and it reminded me of the songs JRRT put in the books (which were some of my favourite parts... sadly, they aren't in the movies... ) and the rhyming flows very nicely. I especially like the third stanza... something about the wording I can't quite place my finger on... but it LIKE it! Yes I do! Oh wow. I want to shower you with praise, but I'm obviously not as great a wordsmith as you, Whitney... ummm.... wow. Oh wow. It's awesome. If you don't write more... I'll be sad. (I was going to threaten you, but I didn't think that would go over so well).
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Post by notanorphan on Jan 2, 2004 22:00:30 GMT -5
that is awesome! write more, write more! I really liked it *rereads for the 8 millionth time*
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Post by Mrs. (Alphonse) Elric on Jan 15, 2004 20:28:34 GMT -5
**faints from disbelief**
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