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Post by PJ on May 2, 2005 3:36:12 GMT -5
Splendid work! You really should fix it up, and see if you can get it published.
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Post by Amber on May 2, 2005 3:40:12 GMT -5
Splendid work! You really should fix it up, and see if you can get it published. *agrees* It's better than some books I've read.
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Post by Ennui on May 2, 2005 3:42:12 GMT -5
Brilliant, Dante. Loved Satan's tears, and your inclusion of Sir Balyn (I wonder if Balan got to heaven?)...I was a little sad that you cut Mordred, but that wasn't vital.
I think this would have a good chance of winning a writing competion, and there are some where you can get quite a lot of money (Several hundred pounds, I mean). I'm not sure, though, if publication would be an option. Depends where, really.
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Post by Dante on May 2, 2005 4:38:06 GMT -5
Brilliant, Dante. Loved Satan's tears, and your inclusion of Sir Balyn (I wonder if Balan got to heaven?)...I was a little sad that you cut Mordred, but that wasn't vital. I cut him literally at the last minute. Whilst doing some research, I discovered that he was already in the Inferno - he's referred to, although not by name, somewhere in the last few cantos, implying that he's there. Putting him in Satan's mouth, then, would have created something of a chronological inconsistency. I didn't want to cut him, but my hand was forced.
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Antenora
Detriment Deleter
Fiendish Philologist
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Post by Antenora on May 2, 2005 4:46:48 GMT -5
Ennui's right--you should definitely enter this in a writing contest, if you can find one. I'd award it richly.
I loved this. *applause* This most excellent final chapter has made my day.
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Post by Ennui on May 2, 2005 4:55:02 GMT -5
Also, my mother judges quite a few anonymous short story competitions. Not that the system's corrupt or anything...
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Post by PJ on May 2, 2005 4:58:50 GMT -5
Also, my mother judges quite a few anonymous short story competitions. Not that the system's corrupt or anything...It's not corrupt if it's in our favour!
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Post by Celinra on May 2, 2005 22:43:58 GMT -5
*applauds*
Lovely story.
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