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Apr 27, 2005 17:10:33 GMT -5
Post by izzybaudelaire95 on Apr 27, 2005 17:10:33 GMT -5
[glow=blue,2,300]This story rocks!! Continue!!. . . Pretty please?[/glow]
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Apr 27, 2005 17:25:45 GMT -5
Post by BSam on Apr 27, 2005 17:25:45 GMT -5
[glow=blue,2,300]This story rocks!! Continue!!. . . Pretty please?[/glow] gimma a breadk i just woked up also, i have i feeling that i'm pretty sure pandora was the character i was thinking she was just cause she seems like the kimnd of person i'd do stuff like that for
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Apr 28, 2005 17:55:09 GMT -5
Post by sloop on Apr 28, 2005 17:55:09 GMT -5
WAKE UP! I WANT MORE STORY!
And text messages *hinthint*
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Threadu
Apr 28, 2005 22:34:55 GMT -5
Post by BSam on Apr 28, 2005 22:34:55 GMT -5
WAKE UP! I WANT MORE STORY! And text messages *hinthint* :(i want more comments on my story... i need to be somewhere good to write a nother bit is nother a word? if i can get on thye computers tonight at my step-dads office i'll try to do some and so people know, i've deviatinged from the plot of the books and movies so that people who know the plot won't be all 'i know whatll happen' and those who don't won't have it spoiled by my story or something thaqt and i've forgotten it slightly
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Threadu
Apr 28, 2005 22:44:21 GMT -5
Post by PJ on Apr 28, 2005 22:44:21 GMT -5
Nice work on the actual Ring thread. Have you already considered how it will all be tied in? And great story, aside from the Phar. Do continue.
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Apr 28, 2005 22:56:10 GMT -5
Post by BSam on Apr 28, 2005 22:56:10 GMT -5
Nice work on the actual Ring thread. Have you already considered how it will all be tied in? And great story, aside from the Phar. Do continue. you mean the images and words that were seen? i dunno, it was random in my head stuff, but i'll find a way... like that mould over there growing around the light, life always finds a way
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Apr 28, 2005 23:11:51 GMT -5
Post by BSam on Apr 28, 2005 23:11:51 GMT -5
written off the top of my head in the library, knowing that at any minute i could get kicked off
PART 5.5
Betsy and Pandora made their way back to Betsys house. Betsy cried a lot while talking to Pandora but told her everything she knew about PJ, about Char, about the thread. Char! She had forgotten about Charlotte. She made a note telling her to find out where she is exactly, if she's ok, in the morning. Antenora, her daughter, was asleep, Celinra, the carer, was watching TV. Antenora paid Celinra the money for looking after Antenora, mentioned that she may be needing her services again quite soon, and showed her out, after waiting for the taxi they called for.
"Is it possible for me to see this thread you mentioned?" Pandora asked Betsy. "If you really want to then I'll see what I can do, however wait until morning. You're still very drunk, I dont' want you to risk yourself while not in your right mind. I'll get a blanket for you. The couch is rather comfy." Pandora looked at Betsy. Yes, this is what I want. "I'd much prefer to share the bed with you. That is, if you don't mind." She winked. "Remember, I am still very drunk, and you aren't exactly sober yourself." Betsy blushed, grinned, and led Pandora to her bedroom...
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Threadu
Apr 29, 2005 0:00:07 GMT -5
Post by PJ on Apr 29, 2005 0:00:07 GMT -5
HAAAAAAAAWT! Do write more.
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Apr 29, 2005 3:57:15 GMT -5
Post by Celinra on Apr 29, 2005 3:57:15 GMT -5
Yay, more was written! And I'm in it!
I look forward to reading more (whether or not I'm a returning character).
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Apr 29, 2005 4:50:39 GMT -5
Post by BSam on Apr 29, 2005 4:50:39 GMT -5
PART 6
Breakfast was awkward. What happened to the love? I want my love. Is it still there? I am uncertain...
Pandora had made some delicious pancakes. Antenora devoured hers. Betsy and Pandora didn't.
"Thank you Miss P. I just love your cooking," stated Antenora before hugging the two women and heading off for school.
This one even loves something as simple as someone elses cooking, I must find a way to get her. But first...
After a long silent breakfast, Pandora mentioned the thread again.
Betsy led her, without a word, to her computer. She logged into 667DarkAvenue, found the thread and copied the link.
Then she logged out, looked at Pandora, and left the room. Standing at the doorway, waiting. "Log in," she said to Pandora. Pandora sat at the computer, logged in under her name, and pasted the link into the address bar.
Betsy found it difficult to watch Pandoras face while Pandora was watching the threadu. Her eyes would almost focus on the face in front of the screen, then suddenly veer to the side for no apparent reason. She could almost tell when it was over, just because she could finally see Pandoras face again, yet she looked diferent.
Pandora put her hand on the mouse, clicked, clicked again, then took her eyes, finally, away from the screen. Her head turned until she was no longer looking at the screen anymore, but right at Betsy. Then she threw up. Half digested pancake found its way out of Pandoras mouth and onto the dirty carpet at her feet.
Wiping the vomit from her mouth and the tears from her eyes, Pandora stood up, lurched over to Betsy, and gave her a massive hug, tears streaming down both Betsys and Pandoras cheeks.
"How can we stop it?" she somehow found the words to ask Betsy. "I don't know, our best bet is to find Char."
She called PJ's parents to find out where the van had taken Charlotte. Then she and Pandora got into her car and were on the way.
I don't know if the love is still there, something is, it's just as strong, but slightly diferent. But this changes nothing, both are on their way to me, I just have to wait, and work on getting the young one...
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Antenora
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Apr 29, 2005 5:08:36 GMT -5
Post by Antenora on Apr 29, 2005 5:08:36 GMT -5
Cool chapter. I also liked the description of the cursed thread.
The italic-speaking person seems to be after me...or is she?
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Apr 29, 2005 5:12:00 GMT -5
Post by BSam on Apr 29, 2005 5:12:00 GMT -5
Cool chapter. I also liked the description of the cursed thread. The italic-speaking person seems to be after me...or is she? have i said if it's a she? i've been trying to keep italicperson ambigious i hope i havnt' failed anywhere but yes, you are what person is after... it'll probably warrant a chapter or two mainly devoted to that, if i can write it,
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Antenora
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Put down that harpoon gun, in the name of these wonderful birds!
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Apr 29, 2005 5:39:31 GMT -5
Post by Antenora on Apr 29, 2005 5:39:31 GMT -5
You never specified the person's gender, but for some reason I'm imagining it female. From what I know of Ringu(learned from various anecdotes and reading bits of the Ringu thread/s), the menace is a little girl.
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Apr 29, 2005 5:42:35 GMT -5
Post by BSam on Apr 29, 2005 5:42:35 GMT -5
You never specified the person's gender, but for some reason I'm imagining it female. From what I know of Ringu(learned from various anecdotes and reading bits of the Ringu thread/s), the menace is a little girl. well, yeah i forgot about that hmm... it'll all be made clear in the future, maybe...i can't promise that but i'll do my best
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Apr 29, 2005 8:41:41 GMT -5
Post by Alice Wilde on Apr 29, 2005 8:41:41 GMT -5
oafljas,bdsmankfj.
Sam, this is great! I loved how you made Antenora the daughter, and Kobolos's feelings for Betsy, and Betsy's feelings for Pandora, and....well, I guess I loved everything.
You're a wonderful author.
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