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Sunny
Jul 6, 2003 19:09:24 GMT -5
Post by pixie ears on Jul 6, 2003 19:09:24 GMT -5
This is my first FanFic, so I hope you guys enjoy!
Chapter 1.
"Those Baudelaires thought they had fooled me! Me, the most handsome man in the world!" Count Olaf chuckled heartily to himself while Esme snickered softly, "No one could ever fool you, Olaf." "So, Esme, what do you think we should do with this Baudelaire Brat?" Count Olaf said as he shot Sunny a nasty glare. "Heylac?" (which means, " Do I have any say in this?") Sunny said angrily.
Sunny, still in her Chabo disguise, was intensely worried about her siblings.
"Hey Olaf, do you still have that cage you used to hang up the little one?" one of the white-faced women said. "Uhhh...yeah, I think so. It should be in the trunk," Count Olaf said, just about catching up with what the white-faced woman was thinking. "We could cage it up until we think of something better to do with it," the other white-faced woman said. "Yeah, I guess," Count Olaf said undecidedly. "Then let's stop this thing," Esme, wearing the latest style in fashion: a long, skin-tight, bright pink, sequined dress (by the way, sequins were very IN at the moment), had recently found out that cars were OUT, and was not very happy about this, said.
The long, black automobile hit a sudden stop that lurched Sunny forward. She hit the glass with a painful thud! Count Olaf and Esme got out of the car and opened the trunk. And that's when I come into the story...
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Sunny
Jul 6, 2003 19:28:08 GMT -5
Post by Melony K. Snicket on Jul 6, 2003 19:28:08 GMT -5
oooooooooooooooooh, DUN DUN DUN!
Very good so far. I updated The Slippery Slope, just to let you know. Anywayz. this is really good.
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Sunny
Jul 6, 2003 19:35:26 GMT -5
Post by pixie ears on Jul 6, 2003 19:35:26 GMT -5
thank-you SO much!!! ;D ;D ;D
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Sunny
Jul 6, 2003 19:38:20 GMT -5
Post by Melony K. Snicket on Jul 6, 2003 19:38:20 GMT -5
Welcome
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Sunny
Jul 6, 2003 20:41:49 GMT -5
Post by pixie ears on Jul 6, 2003 20:41:49 GMT -5
I am taking Mel's idea, and not posting Chapter 2 (which i have written)until i get 3 reviews. So, only 2 more until Chapter 2!
With All Due Respect, Kitrina D. Dessvon
"The Worrld Is Quiet Here"
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Sunny
Jul 6, 2003 22:00:12 GMT -5
Post by pixie ears on Jul 6, 2003 22:00:12 GMT -5
After Chapter 2, I will be starting a sort of "Release Date". For example, I will haver Chapter 2 then under it Chapter 3 coming... Each chapter will be posted about every 3 days.
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Sunny
Jul 6, 2003 22:04:50 GMT -5
Post by Melony K. Snicket on Jul 6, 2003 22:04:50 GMT -5
Ok, thanx 4 the info.
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Sunny
Jul 6, 2003 22:16:03 GMT -5
Post by pixie ears on Jul 6, 2003 22:16:03 GMT -5
okie yw! My sis gave me the idea!
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Sunny
Jul 6, 2003 22:20:56 GMT -5
Post by pixie ears on Jul 6, 2003 22:20:56 GMT -5
yeppers! Okie...this is getting to a 1 word reply thingy! I will hopefully have Chapter 2 posted by tomorrow! (chapter 2 is very short, decided i should warn you!)
With All Due Respect, Kitrina D. Dessvon
"The World Is Quiet Here"
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Sunny
Jul 8, 2003 20:27:32 GMT -5
Post by pixie ears on Jul 8, 2003 20:27:32 GMT -5
Thanks a lot, Swans. I've gotten a lot better with descriptions. In school we have a Young Author's Contest every year. Last yar, my teacher, Mrs. Holloway, really pressured us on the description thing. I'll try to get the description better in my next chapter. (i've already wrote Ch. 2, so i'll have to work on it in Ch. 3) But, if you like the whole description, you would probably really like my book for the Young Author's...at least the beginning of it. The descriptions in that one are good, at least i think so. ;D Anyway, thanks again!
With All Due Respect, Kitrina D. Dessvon
"The World Is Quiet Here"
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Sunny
Jul 8, 2003 20:38:31 GMT -5
Post by pixie ears on Jul 8, 2003 20:38:31 GMT -5
hold on, let me see if i still have it saved on the comp. It's fairly long, so i couldn't type it up. BRB
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Sunny
Jul 8, 2003 20:56:41 GMT -5
Post by pixie ears on Jul 8, 2003 20:56:41 GMT -5
i don't have it saved. Like I thought, I accidently deleted it when I was trying to fix some minor errors. I need to type it aain and save it again! This sucks! Oh well, whenever I get it typed up and saved, i'll either post it up here or i'll send it to you through PM. How's that sound?
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Sunny
Jul 9, 2003 11:06:56 GMT -5
Post by pixie ears on Jul 9, 2003 11:06:56 GMT -5
your welcome ;D
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Sunny
Jul 16, 2003 19:19:25 GMT -5
Post by pixie ears on Jul 16, 2003 19:19:25 GMT -5
Chapter 2
What could I do? My eyes began to water, when I saw, through teary eyes, a blurred version of Olaf and Esme standing angry and annoyed right in front of me. "Well, well, well. What do we have here? I suppose we'll just have to leave you there for now," Olaf said with a malicious grin.
At that, Esme grabbed the cage and shut the trunk door with obviously as much strength as she could muster up. They got in the car and slammed on the gas.
All I could hear from the trunk this time was laughter. Cruel, loud, laughter. I then began to sob. I was just trying to save them. And now, I have put the entire V.F.D. in danger.
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Sunny
Jul 21, 2003 13:09:00 GMT -5
Post by CountQuagmire on Jul 21, 2003 13:09:00 GMT -5
It's got a shot at the Bowl... it shows the thoughts of one of the least respresented characters. Maybe try with different books?
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