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Post by jayK on Oct 25, 2003 15:01:49 GMT -5
I hope you like my new fanfiction, I update faster on my other board though ;D moneymanagers.proboards23.com/index.cgiChapter 1:The word foolish can mean many things, Iddiotic things and Life saving things. If you bought a Playstation game of the market for example, I would call you foolish, because It probably wont work, but If you lit a fire and stood there to see if anyone died, then you would be stupid, as you would most likely die! It was the 13th July, A Friday, which obviously meant something unlucky could happen today, Unlucky things often happened to the Baudelaire Children, Just in a day. One day they Met Carmelita Spatz. One Day They saw the Quagmires leave without them. One day they were on a beach when they got some terrible news. They were on the beach because it was a warm summer day, having fun. When some man (Mr. Poe) Told them there parents were dead. But Dwelling on the past is stupid. A whole year has passed since then. so we must move on, like the Baudelaires. Sunny who could now Walk! was walking with her siblings down a street they have been down before. They were going to a party. It was the Party of Jerome Squalor (also an auction) He was selling Esme's stuff! the baudelaires who had alot of money, but none on them were only going because it was a party. They liked Jerome and wanted to see how he was getting on. They saw an invite at the old house. They approached 667, when a tall man began running towards them. He didn't look scary but he looked familiar, he ran straight past them and was gone. Who was that? Violet wondered. They stepped inside the house and saw that the lift was working! so they stepped inside and clicked the button that led to the top! last time the Baudelaires had been anywere near this elavator they were falling. The Baudelaires were late, the invite said 6:00pm, but no one except Jerome was there. "Just in time" said Jerome. "No One's here" said Violet. Jerome obviously wanted to see them alone, because he didn't seem bothered. "How would you children like to stop here and live with me again?" Klaus had already told Jerome that Olaf would find them if they moved back with him. But Jerome had changed!
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Post by jayK on Oct 26, 2003 1:53:30 GMT -5
chapter 2:
Jerome Squalor was now a very strong looking man - a word which here means powerful, He had large muscles and a tatoo saying I H8 Olaf! Sunny wanted to stay, so did Klaus and violet did because Madame Lulu was dead and Olaf couldn't get information off of her, Even if she was alive. The Baudelaire Orphans agreed to stop the night with Jerome, They each went to the bedrooms they had occupied whilst living with Esme' and Jerome. Jerome must have had a great party as all the wine had been drunk and everything had been eaten! It was getting late so Violet went upstairs with Sunny and settled into bed. All the lights were soon out in the penthouse appartment. The next day Klaus was up first and he went downstairs to have some cereal. He saw the Daily Punctilio. He fought Jerome hated that. The headline was TALL MAN FOUND IN COUNT OMAR'S OLD HOUSE. Klaus had seen a familiar tall man yesterday, but if he worked for Olaf why wouldn't he have grabbed Sunny, or be with him now? He went to wake Violet up. Sunny was up and playing happily with a rock. Klaus woke Violet and told her the news. Violet said "we can't just go and check it out, we have just got here, with jerome." "We can come back" Klaus said. "Alright" Violet said, "but where have they taken him?" sunny answered that "Wes" which probably meant something along the lines of prison. Klaus read the article. Then he shouted out load "Prufrock prison." Prufrock Prison was a prison where escaping was as easy as eating pie. Unless you are allergic to pie, then escaping would ba as easy as smiling, unless you have mouth Desiease, then God help you. Olaf had been in there 6 times, probably more. and it would take the Baudelaires a while to get there. Because it's in Tedia near Uncle Monty's house. But the Baudelaires needed some evidence. He may have the snicket File. Quigley Quagmire had survived a fire, but he escaped using a secret passage. there could have been secret passages in the Baudelaire fire. klaus wanted to go. Violet said "After we lost Olaf in the Graveyard, and he then found us in the city, we'll have to be very careful. There is still something he is scared about, something he has feared since our trip to the Mormain mountains, but I don't know what."
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Post by jayK on Oct 27, 2003 1:16:55 GMT -5
Please comment on my story people! ;D
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Post by J on Oct 27, 2003 16:58:42 GMT -5
Fine. I'll MST it.
Chapter 1: The word foolish can mean many things,
Klaus: Actually, not that many.
Iddiotic
Klaus: Typo.
things and Life saving things.
Sunny: Kelana? (How can "Foolish" mean a life saving thing?)
If you bought a Playstation game of the market
Violet: Of the what?
for example, I would call you foolish, because It probably wont work,
Violet: Why not?
but If you lit a fire and stood there to see if anyone died, then you would be stupid,
Klaus: ....Indeed.
as you would most likely die!
Klaus: And the entire first paragrpah was relevant because...?
It was the 13th July, A Friday, which obviously meant something unlucky could happen today,
Sunny: Henaypa. (Of course. If it's any day of the year, then something unlucky is bound to happen)
Unlucky things often happened to the Baudelaire Children, Just in a day. One day they Met Carmelita Spatz.
Klaus: Last time I checked, it took less than a day to meet someone. Thus, another statement is irrelevant.
One Day They saw the Quagmires leave without them.
Violet: This happened several times.
One day they were on a beach when they got some terrible news. They were on the beach because it was a warm summer day, having fun. When some man (Mr. Poe) Told them there parents were dead. But Dwelling on the past is stupid. A whole year has passed since then. so we must move on,
Klaus: We meaning who?
like the Baudelaires. Sunny who could now Walk!
Sunny: Kwalliarmus. (Exciting as it is, it is still improper to put an exclamation mark in the middle of a sentence)
was walking with her siblings down a street they have been down before. They were going to a party. It was the Party of Jerome Squalor (also an auction) He was selling Esme's stuff! the baudelaires who had alot of money, but none on them were only going because it was a party.
Klaus: Loop hole. Sunny and Violet: Uh oh. Klaus: First of all, the most likely reason we didn't have money on us was because Violet is not of age. If Violet IS of age in this, then it means Sunny is 4 or 5. Most 4 or 5 year olds know how to walk, thus, a third statement is yet again, irrelevant.
They liked Jerome and wanted to see how he was getting on. They saw an invite at the old house. They approached 667, when a tall man began running towards them. He didn't look scary but he looked familiar, he ran straight past them and was gone. Who was that? Violet wondered. They stepped inside the house and saw that the lift was working! so they stepped inside and clicked the button that led to the top! last time the Baudelaires had been anywere near this elavator they were falling. The Baudelaires were late, the invite said 6:00pm, but no one except Jerome was there. "Just in time" said Jerome. "No One's here" said Violet. Jerome obviously wanted to see them alone, because he didn't seem bothered. "How would you children like to stop here and live with me again?" Klaus had already told Jerome that Olaf would find them if they moved back with him. But Jerome had changed! Sunny: Yeta. (But that doesn't mean Olaf has.)
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Post by J on Oct 27, 2003 17:06:05 GMT -5
-------------------------------------------------------------------------------- chapter 2:
Jerome Squalor was now a very strong looking man - a word which here means powerful,
Violet: Does it mean anything else?
He had large muscles and a tatoo saying I H8 Olaf!
Klaus: No comment.
Sunny wanted to stay, so did Klaus and violet did because Madame Lulu was dead and Olaf couldn't get information off of her, Even if she was alive. The Baudelaire Orphans agreed to stop the night with Jerome, They each went to the bedrooms they had occupied whilst living with Esme' and Jerome. Jerome must have had a great party as all the wine had been drunk and everything had been eaten!
Klaus (imitating a narrorator) Actually, there had been no guests. Jerome had eaten everything, so the supposed muscles he had was actually fat, and he drank all the whine, so he was drunk when he invited the Baudelaires to stay. Sunny: Jinapa. (It's quite awkward and unnatural when we try to be funny)
It was getting late so Violet went upstairs with Sunny and settled into bed. All the lights were soon out in the penthouse appartment. The next day Klaus was up first and he went downstairs to have some cereal. He saw the Daily Punctilio. He fought Jerome hated that.
Klaus: Bad typo. Violet: You haven't pointed out the last 50 typos, why start again now?
The headline was TALL MAN FOUND IN COUNT OMAR'S OLD HOUSE. Klaus had seen a familiar tall man yesterday, but if he worked for Olaf why wouldn't he have grabbed Sunny, or be with him now?
Sunny: (sarcastically) Uphnia? (Maybe it's because...there's more than one tall man in the universe?)
He went to wake Violet up. Sunny was up and playing happily with a rock. Klaus woke Violet and told her the news. Violet said "we can't just go and check it out, we have just got here, with jerome." "We can come back" Klaus said. "Alright" Violet said, "but where have they taken him?" sunny answered that "Wes" which probably meant something along the lines of prison. Klaus read the article. Then he shouted out load "Prufrock prison." Prufrock Prison was a prison where escaping was as easy as eating pie. Unless you are allergic to pie, then escaping would ba as easy as smiling, unless you have mouth Desiease, then God help you. Olaf had been in there 6 times, probably more. and it would take the Baudelaires a while to get there. Because it's in Tedia near Uncle Monty's house. But the Baudelaires needed some evidence. He may have the snicket File. Quigley Quagmire had survived a fire, but he escaped using a secret passage.
Klaus: Four...five...six. About six irrelevant statements.
there could have been secret passages in the Baudelaire fire. klaus wanted to go. Violet said "After we lost Olaf in the Graveyard,
Sunny: Detena. (This is probably why people should read a whole series of books instead of the last one.)
and he then found us in the city, we'll have to be very careful. There is still something he is scared about, something he has feared since our trip to the Mormain mountains, but I don't know what."
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Post by jayK on Nov 9, 2003 12:35:19 GMT -5
Thankyou, I'll give you chapter 3 to work on!
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Post by jayK on Nov 21, 2003 12:38:29 GMT -5
Chapter 3:
The Baudelaires had fought the man looked familiar, so they were GOING to find out if he was. Prufrock Prison was 2 miles away, so they had left Jerome a note:
Dear Jerome, We must investigate something, we know you will get scared we are missing, but please hold on. We will be back by Friday at the latest (It's Tuesday) Please be here when we get back.
Love, V,S & K Baudelaire
Klaus was thinking about were he had seen that man, and he suddenly remembered he was the man with a beard but no hair. "Violet, that man who was at Count Olaf's, he was the man with a beard and no hair!" Klaus said.
"Of Course" Violet said, "he must have thought Olaf was there, so he went there."
Klaus was then thinking that it would be a waste of time going, the children had to get to a place called the Hotel Demoniunem in 2 days and they didn't even know where it was. The man would never tell them. He was just about to point this out, when a newspaper cutting flew past, it said: LAYWER LOSES HER JOB. "Justice Strauss." Violet Exclaimed. "JS" Sunny Replied. Klaus' face lit up "Jerome Squalor." He said. The three children stooped walking and began to talk. "If the message was for Justice, then we best go ask her if she was a member of V.F.D, but if the message was for Jerome! Sunny, I want you to go back to Jerome and ask him whatever you can, He should be able to understand you." "Violet!" Klaus said meaning he didn't want Sunny to be alone. Violet understood "I will go to the man with a beard but no hair, Klaus you take Sunny to Jerome, Sunny ask Jerome if he knows anything about VFD, and see if he can get you to the hotel if he knows anything."
"I'll go to Justice, once Sunny is safe, of course. Klaus said. This was the most important thing in each of the 3 Baudelaires lifes. They had no time to spare, so they all set off. Once Sunny was back with Jerome each baudelaire was alone. Little did they know that they'd be ending up in the same place, with the man the knew least about. The man in the picture on Page 13 of the Snicket File!
*Chapter 4 is in 3 parts, 4a is Sunny's story, 4b is Violet's story and 4c is Klaus' story. Though each is chapter 4, 5 and 6 they are really one large chapter!*
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Post by jayK on Nov 21, 2003 14:09:44 GMT -5
chapter 4:
Saturday the 14th July doesn't sound like an important day, though it would if you gave it a name, such as Warm day, or something. Monday the 16th of July didn't sound important, though I can tell you it will be, Count Olaf will have his faith decided, Beatrice will also have her faith and VFD will decide who keeps the Sugar Bowl.
Sunny Baudelaire had gone back to ask Jerome Squalor a few things, She had walked home with her brother Klaus, who Then went to Justice Strauss' house. This chapter will describe Sunny Baudelaire's walk home to Jerome's home and what she did afterwards.
Violet had just said goodbye to her two siblings when The black automobile drove past. it stopped next to Sunny and Klaus, they kept walking. The car started driving at there speed and the window wound down. Count Olaf was wearing a disguise that didn't take much effort to put on. He had only put glass eyes in, he looked like Jacques Snicket.
He spat on Klaus' shoe. Klaus looked up and stared at Olaf. he said "You will never get into VFD secretly. you will be spotted." "Olaf, spitting is SO out." said Esme' Gigi Gingevire Squalor. "Esme' dear if we are going to steal Jerome's map to the Hotel we'll have to hurry." Olaf said.
Klaus Baudelaire never heard what Olaf said next. He just picked Sunny up and ran to Jerome's house. They saw the automobile parked outside. Olaf was in it, Esme' was not. Klaus took out his door key and quickly opened the door. Jerome and Esme' were talking, Klaus began to eavesdrop, just like Violet used to do.
I hate to tell you the conversation that follows. I didn't find out about it until five years had passed. I wish I had, I could have saved Beatrice!!!!!!
"Yes Jerome dear, we can go there, I'll untie you and once Olaf has pushed Beatrice out of the window we can push him out." Esme' said. "Esme' Olaf cannot push Beatrice out of the window, my best friends brother, Lemony, loves her."said Jerome "I am aware, but Jerome, Jacques Is DEAD, Olaf Killed him, but we can get revenge, honey, all we need to do is push him out of the window. Beatrice will destroy the Volunteers if she doesn't die." Esme' said "............Jacques Snicket is dead? ................. I will Kill Olaf, now!" Jerome said. "NO, All in due time, Jerome."
Klaus burst in, " DON'T TRUST HER!." "Klaus, something very important is happening soon, the Scism is ending. and we must kill many people, as if it's easy. But it is hard! you stay here and look after your sister, it will be to shocking for you." Jerome said "SHOCKING? starting Fires is SHOCKING, which Esme' finds fun! BESIDES I MUST GO, ONE OF MY PARENTS MAY BE ALIVE, THEY WILL BE THERE." " true." Sunny said
"Klaus, dearest, you can't come with Olaf even if I tied you up, he wouldn't believe that you wanted to see someone die!" "DON'T YOU DARE TALK TO ME LIKE THAT." Klaus said to Esme'
"Come on, Jerome lets get some rope and the map." Jerome left the room. He came back ten minutes later. He was tied up. "If you go, I can't trust you. Klaus said." Jerome just left. Sunny could hear the rest: Olaf, I have got Jerome, Beatrice is one of his enemies, he would like to see her die! He is tied up he will bring no harm. Esme' said.
Klaus was crying. Sunny hugged his legs. "Come on." she said. Klaus knew she was right and they set off for Justice Strauss' house.
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Post by jayK on Nov 21, 2003 14:29:51 GMT -5
Chapter 5:
Violet could just see the faint outlines of Klaus and Sunny Baudelaire, having a dictionary in front of one's self is often helpful as you can look up the meaning of a word you don't know! such as faint. Short, hard too see, just feesible. or when someone sees something so teribble. They just fall asleep instantly. well now after think about dictionaries Violet Baudelaire could not see her siblings. She started walking down random Road. random in random road had no capital letter, It just Didn't. My last sentence was also grammatically wrong. something I do all the time! It reminds me of Deja Vu! She started walking down random Road. random in random road had no capital letter, It just Didn't. My last sentence was also grammatically wrong. something I do all the time! It reminds me of Deja Vu! Anyway violet baudelaire was not fearing anything YET, it was light out but it would be dark soon. not till 4, at least. the winter time would be the setting of this story. as no setting has been established yet. but it'll be important in chapter 12, 7 chapters away, you will find out. as Winter means bad weather it started to rain, like it did, when you thought hard a bout one particular thing. eg. rain. Violet didn't have an umbrella, she never had had an umbrella. she did have a purple coat though, with a hood. she liked the colour purple, after all her name was violet. she was now exactly 3 miles away from Prufrock Prison (notice the capital in Prufrock) She was going to see a man sunny refered to as No hair, but beard. which was really, easy to understand. So Violet set off and closed up her brain. 7:00pm, it was dark and cold Violet had almost reached the prison, when she saw 2 large guards at the prison, 2 ladys from a distance they looked scary. At close Violet reconised them easily. they were the 2 powder faced woman. Who left Olaf 1 wekk and 3 days ago. they said to Violet "We haven't started being evil have we?" Violet replied "No" instantly and pushed past the women. something she never usually did. But she did, and as it grew darker she entered the prison, she didn't know how long she needed to stay, but she walked in, not realising how dangerous a mistake it was at the time.
That was the longest chapter, and yet the most stupidest chapter ever! If this was a film, chapter 5 would probably be cut totally. But there was a bit of action, and it was very important, a clue for the end of the book. Go back and read this again, you will realise.
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Post by jayK on Nov 21, 2003 15:33:19 GMT -5
Can i have some comments please? I really need them!
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Post by Luigi on Nov 21, 2003 18:56:24 GMT -5
Chapter 3:
The Baudelaires had fought the man looked familiar, so they were GOING to find out if he was.
Klaus: *yawns* Er...that's the second time you used "fought" instead of thought and uh....why'd you put GOING in all caps?
Prufrock Prison was 2 miles away, so they had left Jerome a note:
Dear Jerome, We must investigate something, we know you will get scared we are missing, but please hold on. We will be back by Friday at the latest (It's Tuesday) Please be here when we get back.
Love, V,S & K Baudelaire
Sunny: Kya? (Which one of us would say that?)
Klaus was thinking about were he had seen that man, and he suddenly remembered he was the man with a beard but no hair. "Violet, that man who was at Count Olaf's, he was the man with a beard and no hair!" Klaus said.
"Of Course" Violet said, "he must have thought Olaf was there, so he went there."
Klaus was then thinking that it would be a waste of time going, the children had to get to a place called the Hotel Demoniunem
Violet: Since when do we have to get to Hotel Demoniunem? I thought we were going to hotel Denoument.
in 2 days and they didn't even know where it was. The man would never tell them. He was just about to point this out, when a newspaper cutting flew past, it said: LAYWER LOSES HER JOB. "Justice Strauss." Violet Exclaimed.
Sunny: Uph! (It would be rude to assume that any female lawer losing her job would be Justisce Strauss!)
"JS" Sunny Replied. Klaus' face lit up "Jerome Squalor." He said. The three children stooped walking and began to talk. "If the message was for Justice, then we best go ask her if she was a member of V.F.D, but if the message was for Jerome! Sunny, I want you to go back to Jerome and ask him whatever you can, He should be able to understand you."
Klaus: Why was the pronoun "he", meaning "Jerome" capitilized in the middle of a sentence? He's not God...
"Violet!" Klaus said meaning he didn't want Sunny to be alone. Violet understood "I will go to the man with a beard but no hair, Klaus you take Sunny to Jerome, Sunny ask Jerome if he knows anything about VFD, and see if he can get you to the hotel if he knows anything."
"I'll go to Justice, once Sunny is safe, of course. Klaus said. This was the most important thing in each of the 3 Baudelaires lifes. They had no time to spare, so they all set off. Once Sunny was back with Jerome each baudelaire was alone. Little did they know that they'd be ending up in the same place, with the man the knew least about. The man in the picture on Page 13 of the Snicket File! Violet: There were 3 men in that picture. Sunny: Osoeonatsabea. (It's safe to assume that it's neither Jacque or our dad. They're dead.) Violet: I know, I was just saying that to point out the mis-- Sunny: Sa, (I know)
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Post by Luigi on Nov 21, 2003 19:09:20 GMT -5
chapter 4:
Saturday the 14th July doesn't sound like an important day, though it would if you gave it a name, such as Warm day, or something.
All: Errr.....
Monday the 16th of July didn't sound important, though I can tell you it will be, Count Olaf will have his faith decided, Beatrice will also have her faith and VFD will decide who keeps the Sugar Bowl.
All: Errr.... Sunny: Faze. (And it's "fate". Unless, of course, you are talking about what religion they're deciding)
Sunny Baudelaire had gone back to ask Jerome Squalor a few things, She had walked home with her brother Klaus, who Then went to Justice Strauss' house. This chapter will describe Sunny Baudelaire's walk home to Jerome's home and what she did afterwards.
Violet had just said goodbye to her two siblings when The black automobile drove past. it stopped next to Sunny and Klaus, they kept walking. The car started driving at there speed and the window wound down. Count Olaf was wearing a disguise that didn't take much effort to put on. He had only put glass eyes in, he looked like Jacques Snicket. Sunny: Anedertanka! (But Jacques is DEAD! Olaf would have to put on Hollywood make up to make him look like a decomposing body.) Violet: And what would a dead man be doing, walking around? Klaus: And Jacque didn't look anything like Olaf, except the unibrow and the tatoo.
He spat on Klaus' shoe. Klaus looked up and stared at Olaf. he said "You will never get into VFD secretly. you will be spotted." "Olaf, spitting is SO out." said Esme' Gigi Gingevire Squalor. "Esme' dear if we are going to steal Jerome's map to the Hotel we'll have to hurry." Olaf said.
Klaus Baudelaire never heard what Olaf said next. He just picked Sunny up and ran to Jerome's house. They saw the automobile parked outside. Olaf was in it, Esme' was not. Klaus took out his door key and quickly opened the door. Jerome and Esme' were talking, Klaus began to eavesdrop, just like Violet used to do.
I hate to tell you the conversation that follows. I didn't find out about it until five years had passed. I wish I had, I could have saved Beatrice!!!!!!
Klaus: That's six too many exclamation marks.
"Yes Jerome dear, we can go there, I'll untie you and once Olaf has pushed Beatrice out of the window we can push him out." Esme' said. "Esme' Olaf cannot push Beatrice out of the window, my best friends brother, Lemony, loves her."said Jerome "I am aware, but Jerome, Jacques Is DEAD, Olaf Killed him, but we can get revenge, honey, all we need to do is push him out of the window. Beatrice will destroy the Volunteers if she doesn't die." Esme' said "............Jacques Snicket is dead? ................. I will Kill Olaf, now!" Jerome said.
Klaus: That's too-many-to-count-too many elipses. Violet: And that's way out of character. Sunny: Piun. (But it's a fanfic. Characters are never in-character. And JayK said in the beggining Jerome was different. He has a tatoo. A tatoo written in 7337.)
"NO, All in due time, Jerome."
Klaus burst in, " DON'T TRUST HER!."
Klaus: That's one too many marks of punctuation.
"Klaus, something very important is happening soon, the Scism is ending.
All: Er....
and we must kill many people, as if it's easy. But it is hard! you stay here and look after your sister, it will be to shocking for you." Jerome said "SHOCKING? starting Fires is SHOCKING, which Esme' finds fun! BESIDES I MUST GO, ONE OF MY PARENTS MAY BE ALIVE, THEY WILL BE THERE." " true." Sunny said
"Klaus, dearest, you can't come with Olaf even if I tied you up, he wouldn't believe that you wanted to see someone die!" "DON'T YOU DARE TALK TO ME LIKE THAT." Klaus said to Esme'
"Come on, Jerome lets get some rope and the map." Jerome left the room. He came back ten minutes later. He was tied up. "If you go, I can't trust you. Klaus said." Jerome just left. Sunny could hear the rest: Olaf, I have got Jerome, Beatrice is one of his enemies, he would like to see her die! He is tied up he will bring no harm. Esme' said.
Klaus was crying. Sunny hugged his legs. "Come on." she said. Klaus knew she was right and they set off for Justice Strauss' house. Klaus: Er...sorry. I have no idea what's going on. I spaced out and only paid half attention to the ending of this. Er...we've got another chapter?
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Post by jayK on Nov 22, 2003 3:53:37 GMT -5
yeah and chapter five changes straight to winter!
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Post by Luigi on Nov 22, 2003 19:50:43 GMT -5
Chapter 5:
Violet could just see the faint outlines of Klaus and Sunny Baudelaire, having a dictionary in front of one's self is often helpful as you can look up the meaning of a word you don't know! such as faint.
Violet: Even I know what "faint" means. Sunny: Gerna. (And there was a useless exclamation mark in the middle)
Short, hard too see, just feesible. or when someone sees something so teribble. They just fall asleep instantly. well now after think about dictionaries Violet Baudelaire could not see her siblings.
(The Baudelaires exchange glances, raise their eyebrow, and decide not to comment)
She started walking down random Road. random in random road had no capital letter, It just Didn't. My last sentence was also grammatically wrong.
Klaus: Good. Since you know, we don't have to tell you how poor that sentence was, that "random" needs to be capitilized in the beggining of the middle sentence, that you should end that sentence and say "It just didn't", and lower case the didn't.
something I do all the time! It reminds me of Deja Vu! She started walking down random Road. random in random road had no capital letter, It just Didn't. My last sentence was also grammatically wrong. something I do all the time! It reminds me of Deja Vu!
Sunny: Jakep. (Don't comment. Don't say that that has already been used in the books, and that it just doesn't seem right here)
Anyway violet baudelaire was not fearing anything YET, it was light out but it would be dark soon. not till 4, at least. the winter time would be the setting of this story. as no setting has been established yet. but it'll be important in chapter 12,
Sunny: DOZE? (12 CHAPTERS, AT LEAST?)
7 chapters away, you will find out. as Winter means bad weather it started to rain, like it did, when you thought hard a bout
Klaus: About is one word.
one particular thing. eg. rain. Violet didn't have an umbrella, she never had had an umbrella. she did have a purple coat though, with a hood. she liked the colour purple, after all her name was violet.
Violet: My name should be captilized, and just because my name means "purple" doesn't mean I like the color. I mean, I do, but still...
she was now exactly 3 miles away from Prufrock Prison (notice the capital in Prufrock)
Sunny: Teruniumpelnisdafaganeryuncavera. (I think we're getting to him. We shouldn't be this hard on him, at least he's learning.) She was going to see a man sunny
Klaus: Notice the lower case in Sunny's name, which it shouldn't be. Sunny: KLAUS! (KLAUS, DON'T BE SO RUDE!)
refered to as No hair, but beard. which was really, easy to understand. So Violet set off and closed up her brain.
Violet: Is that possible?
7:00pm, it was dark and cold Violet had almost reached the prison, when she saw 2 large guards at the prison, 2 ladys from a distance they looked scary. At close Violet reconised them easily. they were the 2 powder faced woman. Who left Olaf 1 wekk
Klaus: And what time-period is a "wekk"? Sunny: (bites Klaus)
and 3 days ago. they said to Violet "We haven't started being evil have we?" Violet replied "No" instantly and pushed past the women. something she never usually did. But she did, and as it grew darker she entered the prison, she didn't know how long she needed to stay, but she walked in, not realising how dangerous a mistake it was at the time.
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Post by lemonysinlaw on Nov 22, 2003 19:54:22 GMT -5
How come I don't believe that you're not advertising?
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