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Post by isadora on Aug 16, 2003 12:58:29 GMT -5
heres a strange poem i wrote it was inspired by the anime show cyborg 009 here goes...ahem i once had a soul but u took that from me i oncehad a life but u took that too there was somethin about u that made me give it to u youve stolen my family my friends my dog i sit here alone in the world curled up in a ball u have me i try to think but i cant i am lost in this world i sit w/ the rest youve stolen lives from forever yours? u took me apart and put me back together guns in my arms i am forever yours no i am human iwas human i realize that u are the enemy me...i i can still be human y not i can no matter what u sayi am a cyborg? yes but? you didnt take my soul if u did i wouldnt cry but... here i am crying i dry my tears we shall not give up we will take u down we r not cyborgs we r humans okay its long
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Post by isadora on Aug 19, 2003 16:09:50 GMT -5
pllez post i wanna know wat people think u can say its crap if u want
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Post by Indistinguishable Blob on Aug 19, 2003 17:05:57 GMT -5
*Claps for Isadora* Cool! I have never seen that show, but that makes me want to check it out.
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Post by isadora on Aug 19, 2003 17:09:58 GMT -5
How old are you Isadora? I gotta say that's the best thing I've read in a long time.. I especially like the line.. youve stolen my family my friends my dog *smiles weakly* uhh im 12 ill be 13 on november the4th though um thanx for the compliments
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Post by MambaduMal on Aug 19, 2003 22:10:10 GMT -5
*clap clap clap clap clap* Very good ;D 'Tis depressing... in a good way, of course I guess the only criticism would be the typing, it's all in netspeak ;D Unless it's part of the effect...
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Post by isadora on Aug 20, 2003 16:00:31 GMT -5
wat the hek is netspeak
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Post by MambaduMal on Aug 20, 2003 16:01:51 GMT -5
Like saying 'u' instead of 'you'. There's nothing wrong with it, I was just commenting that the poem seemed to be in mostly netspeak... I'm sorry if I offended you...
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Post by negativenine on Aug 20, 2003 16:07:56 GMT -5
I like it. I think the way it's written adds to the cyborg-y-ness.
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Post by isadora on Aug 20, 2003 16:37:12 GMT -5
Like saying 'u' instead of 'you'. There's nothing wrong with it, I was just commenting that the poem seemed to be in mostly netspeak... I'm sorry if I offended you... no u didnt affend me i did that on purpose ;D so i didnt have to write as much ;D
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Post by isadora on Aug 20, 2003 19:15:51 GMT -5
the ded thing or my poem
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Post by isadora on Aug 20, 2003 19:28:08 GMT -5
yay deepness like vinager sort of ooooooooo i like juice yeah well it took me 5 minutes to rite it takes me about 2 hours 2 write a couplet
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Post by isadora on Aug 20, 2003 19:48:33 GMT -5
yay yay yay ;D wasabi i dont know wat that is but yay ;D
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