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Post by jayK on Jan 1, 2004 13:25:36 GMT -5
OOH, hello, Dr. Hibert, welcome To Fame Academy, come inside, 6 people left to enter, get writing songs current students
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Post by DetectiveDupin on Jan 1, 2004 13:29:14 GMT -5
Hehee.
*writes*
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Post by The Amazing...Spider-Man! on Jan 1, 2004 16:07:48 GMT -5
name:scott
age:20
gender:male
occupation:comic book store owner
reason why you should let me in:i consider you all my friends
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Post by jayK on Jan 1, 2004 16:23:01 GMT -5
ok your in, we need 5 more people, we currently have
Dupin
Ace
Ava Adore
Jack2004
ScottAlmighty
Atleast I think so, so you 5 people while you wait for more students get posting your songs!
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Post by DetectiveDupin on Jan 1, 2004 16:37:45 GMT -5
The Lost Soul
Verse One:
The path is unclear,
The time is not near,
I feel myself drifting away,
The veiw is all blurred,
haven't you heard,
that I need someone to save me!
Bridge:
Haven't I told you,
how much I love you,
but you shoved it right back,
Couldn't you see
I thought you loved me,
but now I've gone off track
Chorus:
I try to hold on,
for you,
I'll try to keep in,
for you,
but I feel myself slipping away,
I'll try to fight back,
for you,
I'll try to move on,
for you,
but for now I'll always be a lost soul.
Verse Two:
I'm starting to waste,
I had bad taste,
you ever go with you,
I 'm gonna leave,
I dont believe,
I thought of you as my boo
Bridge:
Haven't I told you,
how much I love you,
but you shoved it right back,
Couldn't you see
I thought you loved me,
but now I've gone off track
Chorus:
I try to hold on,
for you,
I'll try to keep in,
for you,
but I feel myself slipping away,
I'll try to fight back,
for you,
I'll try to move on,
for you,
but for now I'll always be a lost soul.
Third Verse (The strange bit):
Watch me fall,
watch me crawl,
as I lose everything I've got,
I'ma ll shaking,
It's all your making,
how dare you tell me not,
how dare you tell me to stop what your doing,
because,
I DON'T CARE!
Chorusx3
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Post by jayK on Jan 1, 2004 16:44:28 GMT -5
wicked, that was good george, when we have all 10 songs we'll have a vote, though I have to say that was a good guide, and if that carries on you could damn well win this, If voters wish to remain hidden you can PM ravdekdaavaa
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Post by lemonysinlaw on Jan 1, 2004 19:04:36 GMT -5
You must be Insay-ne
If you think it’s OK
To treat me this way
Each and ev-e-ry day
(Prechorus)
It’s not alright
To go through this again
Without a fight
And this time it’s no new news
This time I know you’ll lose
(Chorus)
You’re not gonna get through
This time this time
You’d better listen to
This rhyme this rhyme
Everything is over now
All I ask myself is how
How could you do that
To me?
Why would you do that
To me?
D’you think you should do that
To me?
(Prechorus)
It’s not alright
To go through this again
Without a fight
And this time it’s no new news
This time I know you’ll lose
(Chorus)
You’re not gonna get through
This time this time
You’d better listen to
This rhyme this rhyme
How bad could it be?
How bad should it be?
How bad would it be?
Do you still love me?
(Bridge)
I’ve seen you with more than one girl
That’s discluding me
How many girls have you been with?
I think more than three
How many times have you been to the club?
How many times have you ordered a mug?
How many times have you gotten drunk?
How many times have you said life stunk?
I think the answer to the questions
Is one of these suggestions:
ONE
TWO
THREE
FOUR
FIVE
SIX
SEVEN
EIGHT
But how many times have you said
That you’ll always be there?
How many times have you said that you love me,
Not just my hair
Or my teeth
Or my eyes
Or any of my looks
(Prechorus)
It’s not alright
To go through this again
Without a fight
And this time it’s no new news
This time I know you’ll lose
(Chorus)
You’re not gonna get through
This time this time
You’d better listen to
This rhyme this rhyme
It’s ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooover
over
over
over
over
(repeat till fade)
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Post by jayK on Jan 2, 2004 4:07:48 GMT -5
Well that's certainly great! I haven't got any PM's yet but I am sure people will vote for you, next week the challenge deepens, you have to give your songs a genre, eg. hip hop, punk pop. If you can do that you will get voted, VOTING HAS BEGUN, so them other 3 people should really get writing!
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Post by DetectiveDupin on Jan 2, 2004 6:17:35 GMT -5
*makes 'Vote For George' badges*
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Post by lemonysinlaw on Jan 2, 2004 9:04:27 GMT -5
takes five, then eats them
Ugh...salty.
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Post by The Amazing...Spider-Man! on Jan 2, 2004 12:27:04 GMT -5
here's mine
as your doorbell goes ding dong,
i stand outside thinking of a song
when i told my girl we had to talk,
she chucked me and my stuff on the sidewalk
i stand on your porch to ask you out,
your boyfriend gives me a clout
while i pass a boy in a t-shirt with simpson,bart,
i think of a way to win your heart
(chorus)
when i am in love,
the girl is a beautiful turtle dove
when i find a dime,
i hope you will be with me for all time
if i hear a bell,
i want you to be with me in heaven or hell
i look up to your window,
i see it covered in snow
(chorus)
when i am in love,
the girl is a beautiful turtle dove
when i find a dime,
i hope you will be with me for all time
i ring your doorbell in winter,
hoping,that with me you won't be bitter
you invite me in,
and put a photo of your boyfriend in the bin
i ask you why,
you start to cry
you burst into tears,
as you tell me your deepest fears
when i talk to you,
i admit something too
i want to be your boyfriend,
to be there until the end
hope you liked it
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Post by jayK on Jan 2, 2004 12:58:03 GMT -5
I liked it but you forced alot of the ryhmes, like the turtle dove, love and Bart Heart, If you go through I think you'll have to make your songs not rhyming, they'll still sound good, But well done, keep it up it was a 8/10
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Post by The Amazing...Spider-Man! on Jan 2, 2004 14:20:26 GMT -5
thanks i've noticed that some songs i hear rhyme like:"cos true love lasts 4eva
and now we're back together"
(busted,crashed the wedding)
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Post by jayK on Jan 2, 2004 15:59:47 GMT -5
yeah there are many rhymes in the world
when i sayed that my lips curled
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Post by The Amazing...Spider-Man! on Jan 2, 2004 16:02:08 GMT -5
then you see why i did a rhyme
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