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Apr 21, 2005 14:06:23 GMT -5
Post by Alice Wilde on Apr 21, 2005 14:06:23 GMT -5
Ditto. Sam, you rock. I love love love this. PJ/Char is love. Incidentally, I also rather liked Kobolos's version of the last chapter.
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Threadu
Apr 21, 2005 17:01:59 GMT -5
Post by BSam on Apr 21, 2005 17:01:59 GMT -5
PART 2.5 (something i just knocked up in the library because i can and because i wanted to post something but part 3 is at home still...)
Kobolos awoke with a terrible headache and no memory of the past few hours, he had a feeling he'd been horrible to someone, Betsy perhaps, but he wasn't sure. That always happened when he'd been drinking, he just hoped that whatever he had said hadn't ruined anything between them.
Betsy, however, somehow didn't notice how terrible Kobolos was acting towards her, she somehow missed all the snarling, didn't noticed the swearing and the meanness. She knew in her heart that Kobolos was a good man, and her heart just wouldn't let her realise how he was acting then. Her heart just wanted his heart to open up to her. Why couldn't this man she thought the world of feel the same way about her as she did about him?
What is this feeling this girl is experiencing? I have often seen it, through my screens, but never felt it myself. I must make this one mine, I must find out more
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Threadu
Apr 21, 2005 17:40:22 GMT -5
Post by PJ on Apr 21, 2005 17:40:22 GMT -5
Oooh, Kobolos/Betsy. Betsylos? Kobsy? Nice twist.
Unlike PChar
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Threadu
Apr 21, 2005 18:59:04 GMT -5
Post by Charles Vane on Apr 21, 2005 18:59:04 GMT -5
Remember when I thought Betsy/Kobo was unclean? I still think that.
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Antenora
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Apr 22, 2005 4:48:36 GMT -5
Post by Antenora on Apr 22, 2005 4:48:36 GMT -5
Betsy/Kobo is an interesting pairing.
Keep on writing, Sam. This is a cool story.
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Apr 23, 2005 6:16:28 GMT -5
Post by BMatt on Apr 23, 2005 6:16:28 GMT -5
that was more in character for Kobo. thankee.
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Threadu
Apr 23, 2005 19:33:34 GMT -5
Post by BSam on Apr 23, 2005 19:33:34 GMT -5
PART 3
A quick phone call to Charlottes house yielded no results, she'd gone to stay at her boyfriends house a few days ago and they had no clue where she was. Calling PJs house, however, was more fruitful. Betsy didn't get any clear information, mainly because of PJ's parents weeping. Betsy packed, arranged care for Antenora, her daughter, and set off.
Betsy pulls up to PJs house just as a white van drives away. PJs parents are standing out the front. There are tears on their cheeks. "I'm terribly sorry to intrude, my name is Betsy Rellim from the 667 Reporter," she said, "I was wondering if I could ask you about your son, PJ. " At this Mrs. PJ let out a sob and ran back indoors. Mr. PJ looked at Betsy and sighed. "I don't know what happened," he said in his gruff voice, "but feel free to have a look in his room if you want, we havn't changed it, except to remove the girl." "Girl?" "We don't know who she is, her mind's gone, the van just took her away." "So where is your son?" "We don't know, all we know is we got back from our weekend away, found our son gone and that girl, sitting in his room."
She whom I must have has entered the room of my last one. It was unfortunate about that girl they refer to as "Char", she might have been a good one.
Betsy went upstairs and looked in PJs room. It was reasonably messy, not to mention the wet sticky patch right near the door. She made her way around that and headed towards the computer which was still on. PJ appeared to still be logged on at 667 Dark Avenue, however the computer seemed frozen, she could still move the mouse around, but it wasn't letting her click anywhere. In frustration she started randomly moving the mouse around and clicking, just to see if there was any response at all. Finally it landed on a link to a thread which she was sure wasn't there before, and just after Betsy had clicked that link, the whole screen began to change.
I have let you in, please don't let me down. I need you
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Apr 23, 2005 19:33:53 GMT -5
Post by BSam on Apr 23, 2005 19:33:53 GMT -5
PART 4
The link Betsy had clicked on lead her to a thread, the first post of which was what looked like an animated gif. The picture was indistinct, it was as if someone had just animated some random static, but then some images made their way through the static, it was almost as if the image was all she could see, nothing else mattered right now. She did her best to make sense of these images in her eyes and mind, a deers head, a towel, mountains, a river, millions of bodies floating down it, all lifeless and bloody, a massive wave, also, throughout this montage of images, various words appeared also, "Senoma", "Yzay", "Haroon".
Then it stopped, Betsy scrolled down the screen, to see what replies there were to this horrible thread. There were two replies she could see, the screen had frozen again before anymore were visable. Yet there were more. But still, not enough...
Two replies Betsy could see. PJ & Char.
Neither post made any sense, PJs was just a meaningless group of letters and numbers. Charlottes was blank.
Then a box appeared on the screen "You have new messages, read now?" she clicked yes.
The message was similar to PJs post, except that in the chaos she could see the words "In 7 days you will be deleted."
Betsy felt sick. She turned off the computer at the power point, and ran out of the room. Out of the house. Not stopping til she was back in the comfort of her own bed.
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Threadu
Apr 23, 2005 19:53:22 GMT -5
Post by sloop on Apr 23, 2005 19:53:22 GMT -5
Yzay! Keep writingggg. I feel like a movie star.
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Threadu
Apr 23, 2005 20:03:50 GMT -5
Post by BSam on Apr 23, 2005 20:03:50 GMT -5
Yzay! Keep writingggg. I feel like a movie star. Me too, but where can we find one at a time like this?
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Threadu
Apr 24, 2005 0:26:18 GMT -5
Post by Dante on Apr 24, 2005 0:26:18 GMT -5
Oh, excellent. I love this.
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Antenora
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Apr 24, 2005 5:26:48 GMT -5
Post by Antenora on Apr 24, 2005 5:26:48 GMT -5
These new chapters were great. Do keep writing.
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Apr 24, 2005 8:08:34 GMT -5
Post by Amber on Apr 24, 2005 8:08:34 GMT -5
It really is good. *cheer*
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Apr 24, 2005 8:28:37 GMT -5
Post by sweet teat of love on Apr 24, 2005 8:28:37 GMT -5
Intriguing.
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Apr 25, 2005 17:45:35 GMT -5
Post by BSam on Apr 25, 2005 17:45:35 GMT -5
wow
looks like i'll have to write some more then
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