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Post by Kit's tits kick ticks on Nov 1, 2012 6:47:56 GMT -5
You always know where to stop to make the readers want it to go on
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Post by Tryina Denouement on Nov 1, 2012 6:52:30 GMT -5
You always know where to stop to make the readers want it to go on Thank you very much I hope you view the spoiler and- urgh... Google Translated it.
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Post by Dante on Nov 1, 2012 6:57:28 GMT -5
A V.F.D. crematorium is quite a spooky concept. You're using your characters fairly wisely, dividing them between a number of subplots, plans and counter-plans. Keep it up.
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Post by Tryina Denouement on Nov 1, 2012 7:01:01 GMT -5
A V.F.D. crematorium is quite a spooky concept. You're using your characters fairly wisely, dividing them between a number of subplots, plans and counter-plans. Keep it up. Thanks for the praises guys! Anyway, have you Google Translated the synopsis of THAT BOOK? Check it out!
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Post by Tryina Denouement on Nov 3, 2012 1:11:33 GMT -5
19 1 13 1 14 20 8 1 18 21 14 1 23 1 25 25 15 21 ' 18 5 14 5 24 20 !
Numbers foreseen a thousand words, warning of the next.
Probably on Wed-Sat.
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Post by Dante on Nov 6, 2012 8:21:45 GMT -5
How alarming!
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Post by Tryina Denouement on Nov 6, 2012 8:30:06 GMT -5
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Post by Tryina Denouement on Nov 9, 2012 11:09:41 GMT -5
Yay, Chappy Nine!!!!! Sorry for featuring only one char's POV. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- -Chapter Nine- Santorius: “What shall we do? We’re trapped here, and Mr. Godfrey will come soon!” Nellie wondered. “As an author said, it was bad enough that, of a higher race, could only hide behind the greatness and glory, while the lower ones sneak. We might escape while he is away.” Santorius quoted, from a book, that I am afraid, he will no longer see again, not if they could even get out of the terrible misery and woe, not even if they can recite ‘O Death Rock Me Asleep’ a hundred thousand times. They began to look for an escape hole. Nellie poked around for clues of a trapdoor, or other things to help them escape. “An author says, that there is a weakness, and strength, in even the most powerful enchanter or awful person.” Santorius mumbled again, as he worked. I thought, he was thinking of a book, that he and I read, about two bright young children staying at a big castle. “We should have find a way soon.” “But we- AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHH!!!!” she shouted, when she tripped over something metal and slippery, like silk, or an octopus, or a silly little shark. “Are you alright, Miss Nellie?” Santorius asked. He was a very polite person, and being polite, like being a ballerina dancer, may attract possible praise, but no use unless you wrote a book about ballerinas, or other things. “I’m alright, Santorius!” she replied crossly, “But look what I’ve found!” Santorius gasped. It was a sleek piece of metal, under the wooden floor. “It’s a trapdoor!” Santorius realized. He had read a great deal of books, and he certainly had read books about trapdoors and traps for various uses, including a secret mind-reading organization which holds authority, somewhere, very far away. “Let’s go inside! Who knows we can escape!” Nellie opened the latch. “Shall you go first, Santorius?” she asked. “In my honor.” He bowed, and then jumped without a sound. His attitude reminded Nellie of the story of a Professor who teaches archeology and solves mysteries, and is fond of tea. Nellie then jumped, and she fell in a very dark hole. There was, curiously, a candle, that was lit in the darkness. Clack, clack, clack. The unmistakable sound of the shoes of Mr. Godfrey. There was a muffled scream. “MMMMMPPPPPPHHHH!!!!! MMMMPPPPPHHHH!!!!” “Who was that?” Santorius asked. “Hurry, cover the top with this wooden plank!” Nellie gave Santorius a wooden plank. She was used to being quick, having worked as a servant years ago. He covered it up. Just as they closed the trapdoor, they heard the door creak. “You stay here!” the voice of Mr. Godfrey was heard. “No!” out came a voice, and Nellie soon recognised it as Samantha’s. There was the sound of a kick, and an “OW!!!!!” uttered by Mr. Godfrey. “Why did you kick me?” Mr. Godfrey replied with an innocent voice. “Because you promised to give me a new very frilly dress!” Edith Eddleton’s voice was heard. “Frilly dresses are very in at the moment! You dimwit!” she seemed to give Mr. Godfrey a kick. “You dumb girl!” Samantha said out of her anger. “You don’t know what you are doing! Why are you kidnapping me?!” But, suddenly, footsteps were heard from the trapdoor. Nellie and Santorius turned to see Annie and Clarabel Sodor looking at them with an evil smile. Clarabel held a dagger covered with blood. “Prepare.” she said. “Nevermore.” Annie replied. “Annie! Clarabel?! What actually happened?”
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Post by Dante on Nov 9, 2012 11:24:39 GMT -5
Annie and Clarabel's personalities seem a bit of a world away from their source text, but that certainly makes them more striking and creepy. Santorious seems like a pretty decent, upstanding person. A shame that he seems likely to die soon.
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Post by Tryina Denouement on Nov 9, 2012 11:29:33 GMT -5
Annie and Clarabel's personalities seem a bit of a world away from their source text, but that certainly makes them more striking and creepy. Santorious seems like a pretty decent, upstanding person. A shame that he seems likely to die soon. World away? Look closely first. The real A and C love their master very much, so probably Mr. T asked them to do that. Santorius is a character from a book (VS) Hailstorm. He dies quite late in the book.
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Post by Charlie on Nov 10, 2012 20:36:43 GMT -5
Okay, how the hell have I missed all this. I thought that you had given up on this, but no... apparently it's not in my bookmarks. It all looks excellent, and I am about to read it... seriously, how have I missed this. Sorry Tryina .Keep on writing well!
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Post by Tryina Denouement on Nov 11, 2012 5:26:46 GMT -5
Just another spot o' mischief. Annie and Clarabel PDF character sheet pic. Probably: Reasons for Editing: Center-ize pic and fix marquee.
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Post by Kit's tits kick ticks on Nov 11, 2012 6:05:11 GMT -5
I like the part of being polite and being a ballerina And the picture is cute, even if the girls don't act very cute in the chapter.
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Post by Tryina Denouement on Nov 11, 2012 6:18:41 GMT -5
I like the part of being polite and being a ballerina And the picture is cute, even if the girls don't act very cute in the chapter. Hehehe ;D *evil smile, to be actual*
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Post by Tryina Denouement on Dec 8, 2012 9:33:52 GMT -5
Sorry that I've not been active for a very long time. Here's a few things to start with: It's Ann and Clars again!Teaser!All it is. Date unknown. Reason For Editing: Teaser uploader has something to do with my Secret Santa.
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