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Post by Hermedy on Jun 13, 2012 12:49:09 GMT -5
This is rapidly approaching the caliber of the actual Avengers movie. I love it and I want more. Also, I feel all "potato yeah, I'm Loki!" but I'm also real life in love with Thor, so this is going to put an awkward twist in my fantasies... If you're Loki, I guess Willis is Thor. Even more awkward... |
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Post by thenarrator on Jun 13, 2012 15:47:09 GMT -5
Clever! Very clever indeed.
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Post by Rellim on Jun 13, 2012 18:45:56 GMT -5
If you're Loki, I guess Willis is Thor. Even more awkward... Yes, Fury, that is what I was referring to... |
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Post by Lady Whatever on Jun 14, 2012 1:16:57 GMT -5
This is pretty smexy stuff. More please.
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Post by Charles Vane on Jun 14, 2012 10:26:50 GMT -5
Well no wonder the power thing was messing up, Trikip was looking after it. Also I love "Pandora did something for a change" Dislike both of you. But cool story bro. |
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Post by Linda Rhaldeen on Jun 14, 2012 13:36:09 GMT -5
Why have a not commented on this yet? I love your style, BSam.
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Post by BSam on Jun 16, 2012 2:20:11 GMT -5
Chapter 3 - The Hurk.
BSam was hanging out in some city. Fixing sick parents and stuff.
A small child ran up to him, "Are you a Doctor? My mother is sick and even tho I hate her because she doesn't treat me like an adult because i'm really an adult I need you to stop her being sick."
BSam followed the child to the outskirts of the city into a house where the child then disappeared.
"Damnit! Kids, no wonder his mother doesn't treat him like an adult."
"It's not his fault, he's not really an adult," Shelly said, appearing behind BSam.
"How did you get there?"
"I had to escape from some russian spies but that was really easy and not worth writing about, basically Tragedy needs you, you're an expert in making fun of his admin powers, and they've gone missing, he's hoping you can help trace them."
"Are you sure he wants me, and not one of my gag accounts? Because last time I used one of those it didn't end well."
"What happened?" Shelly asked, already knowing the answer.
"I got drunk... don't really recall the rest."
He turned to the fridge, took out a beer, and asked Shelly, "So, what will happen if I don't want to come?" He took a mouthful of beer and then turned around to see her pointing a gun in his face, he spat out the beer and laughed.
"Sorry, that was mean, I just wanted to see what you'd do, let's go."
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Post by Shelly on Jun 16, 2012 10:54:44 GMT -5
That's fairly faithful to reality there.
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Post by Deleted on Jun 17, 2012 1:06:27 GMT -5
Yeah I heard about how you got captured by russian spies earlier. I'm glad you're okay.
As for the story, awesome. That small child was very annoying.
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Post by A on Jun 17, 2012 6:08:05 GMT -5
Is Tragedy's first name Nick? Sorry for my late start reading, but I haven't been online for ages apart from the limited access to DA from school.(There is a firewall that I get around by using translate.googel.com.au, dot com doesn't work)
This is very good. The quick transition into dramatic action is very funny. Especially wheb Trag dusts himself after being shot with know apparent anger, or death or whatever, as Kensicle pointed out before.
My favourite lines.
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Post by BSam on Jun 17, 2012 6:29:37 GMT -5
The character he is is Nick Fury, I changed the last name, but kept Nick.
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Post by Christmas Chief on Jun 17, 2012 7:26:56 GMT -5
Good stuff. The final line has the appropriate impact, I think.
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Post by csc on Jun 17, 2012 12:21:28 GMT -5
Great choices for the characters.
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Post by BSam on Jun 17, 2012 12:54:54 GMT -5
Chapter 4.
She poured a drink, and then another.
This was in congratulations for the building that her business partner and lover had made.
He was out doing final modifications on the self sustaining power source that would power the building for many years to come.
He flew back using his robot suit which he made and landed on the roof, the mechanisms of the building removing the robot suit so he was unburdened by it by the time he stood next to her.
"Haha," he said, "Goblin Tower is awesome!"
"I still think it should be named after me. I can see it now, Swans Tower"
"Oh hush, or I shall destroy everything.""
As they began to relax together, the building told him that Agent Coulson was calling.
"I'm not here!" Kobolos called out in response.
But that didn't stop Agent Coulson from appearing in the lift minutes later.
"I said I wasn't here, go away."
But swans yelled out "Bryan! Have a drink!"
"I'm pretty sure his name is Agent, since when was he Bryan?"
"Nick Tragedy needs you, The 667engers are forming."
"I though I was not to be trusted, I know that much." Kobolos turned away and finished his drink.
"Do you think I'd be here if he wasn't desperate? I've got information on his Admin Power Source which has gone missing. If you're in then read up on this then meet us at the secret boat which is our headquarters."
"I guess it could be fun. Alright I'll help. But if it's not fun then I'm destroying your family."
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Post by csc on Jun 17, 2012 13:01:40 GMT -5
"But if it's not fun I'm destroying your family"
Bryan is just perfect as Agent Coulson, by the way.
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