Antenora
Detriment Deleter
Fiendish Philologist
Put down that harpoon gun, in the name of these wonderful birds!
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Post by Antenora on Apr 17, 2005 9:34:51 GMT -5
Is she a red-herring or red-handed? (Something like that. I just wrote down what immediatly came to mind.)
Good chapter, if short.
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Post by MelonB1088 on Apr 17, 2005 9:47:30 GMT -5
*Loves*
Everyone's all in character. And you have the interaction down, too. How some people will tolerate others, and such...
Er. I'm awful at commenting, so let me leave it at 'YZAY!'
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Post by Amber on Apr 17, 2005 10:33:50 GMT -5
I like!
I'm all daydreamy. Which is so real. Once I was daydreaming and I fell down a big hole. The people I was with found it very funny, more so that I couldn't get out. Another time when I was daydreaming I walked in front of a car. I wasn't hurt but the driver wasn't impressed.
So you see, I'm not really "all there" which you made me, yzay!
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Post by Celinra on Apr 17, 2005 10:40:14 GMT -5
Could I maybe be in the story somewhere? Please? *cute puppy eyes*
I really like it so far. It's interesting.
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Post by PJ on Apr 17, 2005 15:40:10 GMT -5
Do continue!
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Post by Akbar Le Grey on Apr 18, 2005 7:33:38 GMT -5
Ye Gads, but I'm tired. I'm sorry every-one, but bgecause of exam stress ,etc I might not have the next chapter up for the next couple of days.
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Post by champ103 on Apr 19, 2005 9:29:49 GMT -5
Oh, that's a shame. It's a great story-I can't wait for chapter seven!
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Post by Akbar Le Grey on Apr 19, 2005 9:42:45 GMT -5
With the reappearance of Dante and Antenora, 667 life had returned to a semblance of normalcy. The Disturbing Discussion section was re-opened and there was general cheer on all sides. However, a feeling of distrust still remained amongst the members. It could not be seen or touched. It was just there. A feeling of suspense weighed down on the stately grounds of 667 Dark Avenue. Especially in the debate chamber of the majestic administerial palace. “We must take order of the situation! Do something!” “Oh, PJ. Do be quiet.” Said Antenora gently. She was still recovering from the attack. “Yes. PJ, shut up for once,” mocked Derik. As soon as Antenora’s back was turned, he stuck his tongue out at PJ. “Now, look. What we have here is simple,” continued Antenora, “A murder. A victim. One thing’s missing, though. A murderer.” “Yes. Perhaps we should try to think of some main suspects,” commented George in his usual practical and organized manner. “I say! You don’t think it could be one of us here, do you?” questioned James eagerly. “Not by any stretch of the imagination,” replied Dante icily, “could I bring myself to believe that one of us would…” Suddenly the huge doors of the chamber burst open and a dignified-looking young man walked through. “Ennui!” Screamed Amber, running up to him. “It was one of us. It was some one here. In this very chamber.” He said, unwavering.
Now things near the end. But will there even be an end?
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Post by Dante on Apr 19, 2005 9:53:14 GMT -5
“It was one of us. It was some one here. In this very chamber.” He said, unwavering. But is there anyone else there, other than the members named?
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Post by Akbar Le Grey on Apr 19, 2005 10:17:38 GMT -5
Dante looked around. "PJ!" he yelled, "Take down the name of every member in this room." PJ hurried to his work, more than a little scared of the fiery wrath of Dante.
That manuscript was carefully preserved. Here is a copy for your reference:
-PJ(Note: this was underlined in the original) -Dante -George -James -BSam -Derik -Ennui -Mr. Who PJ RULZ! -Misery -Akbar -Antenora -Amber -Char -Pandora -Beatrice GO PJ! -Celinra -Kimia -J. -M. -VioletB
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Post by Dante on Apr 19, 2005 10:23:19 GMT -5
That's a lot of suspects.
Okay, I definitely need more information before even trying to guess.
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Post by Akbar Le Grey on Apr 19, 2005 12:12:31 GMT -5
“How DARE they! No, really. How DARE they!” complained James, to the small boy walking beside him, “After all we’ve been through, they place suspicion on ME! How DARE they?” “Yes,” replied his companion, “but remember, we’re all suspects. It’s not just you.” “Yes, but still! How dare they!” Replied James, obstinately. “Calm down, James.” Advised the boy, “it’s not like we don’t feel bad too.” “I make them huge brilliant banners. And this is how I’m repaid?!” argued James, “treated like some sort of murderer?” Cast out of the community! People whispering about me behind my back!” Unfortunately, at this point a group of rather giggly really cool member-ish girls passed by, whispering and pointing at James. They were, in fact, talking about his story Crimson, and how they worshipped the girl in the banner. Sadly, he didn’t know that. It provided an entrance for a fresh outburst. The boy stiffened and prepared. “WHAT?! NOW EVEN N00BS LAUGH AT ME? HOW DARE THEY!” he screamed. “It’s alright James. I bet they were just giggling at the Kick Me sign on your back.” Replied the boy calmly. “WHAT! Get it off, George. NOW.” Yelled James, a dangerous tone creeping into his voice. “I say! Isn’t that Pandora?” questioned George, blissfully oblivious of James’s imminent explosion. “George. I asked you to do something.” whispered James in a soft and perilous tone. “Pandora? Pandora? Why are you slumped like that?” called George, running towards the red-haired girl leaning against the fence of the palace. He reached. And stopped. And stared. “She’s…she’s not moving...”he murmured. James had caught up with him by now. “She’s alive. She’s been drugged though.” Said James after hastily checking the girls pulse on her slender wrist. “We need to get her somewhere safe.” Whispered George, “NOW.” There was no doubt who was in command. Picking her up ,the two boys rushed towards the Reckless Reading tower.
But were there really any safe places anymore?
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Post by Dante on Apr 19, 2005 12:19:17 GMT -5
James's Feelings: Hurt, or Homicidal? I should stop trying to do those. Well, this is odd. Why would Pandora be drugged, and not killed? It doesn't make sense. Unless YOU FINISH THE SENTENCE. There's at least one red herring in this chapter, I'm sure. But were there really any safe places anymore? I swear that you've used that one before. I'm just too lazy to check.
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Post by odh on Apr 19, 2005 12:25:03 GMT -5
*quotes from msn*
I love this. I really do. Danté: HURT!
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Post by Amber on Apr 19, 2005 12:31:21 GMT -5
. “Ennui!” Screamed Amber, running up to him. Yzay!*includedness* The loserish thing is that's the kind of thing I'd do, only to people I really like, others are only reconised(someone come correct my bad spelling) if I look in their general direction.
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